Subject: Righteous.
Author:
Posted on: 2011-08-18 16:33:00 UTC
I've moved it to Claimed Badfic; hope you don't mind.
Subject: Righteous.
Author:
Posted on: 2011-08-18 16:33:00 UTC
I've moved it to Claimed Badfic; hope you don't mind.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7224646/1/TheNarniasElf_Princess
This...is an abomination. Language abuse, possible Grelvish with parenthetical translations, some sort of reincarnation I think, a stupid name (Gwengwyvar), Mary Sue, and more.
And it's a Narnia fic.
*Blatant* plagiarism of Tolkien. Six chapters in, we get this: "I'm too lazy at the moment to put full on sindar words so bare with me. Words I gotten from Lord of the rings so the own it." Yeah. Sure.
This was the prologue, before the chapter was deleted:
"I amar prestar aen, han mathon ne nen, han mathon ne chae a han noston ned 'wilith.( 'The world is changed; I can feel it in the water, I can feel it in the earth, I can smell it in the air.' )
Much that once was is lost for none that survive the remembrance of Narnia
It began at the forging of the three great weapons. One Atomist were given to the Elves the immortal, wisest, and fairest of all creatures ones that lived along side Aslan. Second Rhindon gifted to the new race of man given to King Frank, the first man of Narnia. And finally Mortalitas above all else could consume its owner to despair that soon lost and forgotten.
For within these weapon was the strength and will to govern the birth of Narnia, but all of them deceived. For another sword was made. In the land of Charn, another world, The last queen Jadis forge in secret another weapon of ice, to defy all laws that of a wand and into this wand she used her revenged her ambition and her frozen heart to set justices to all Narnian life. One spell to rule them all and bond Artimist and Mortalitas.
One by one the free lands of Narnia fell to the power of Jadis with the creatures of darkness by her side. After the fall of King Frank there were some who had resisted. The last alliances of Narnian and elves marched against the armies of Jadis and on the slopes Monomenta (cross gates) the fought for the freedom of Narnia.
But the power of Jadis's wand could not be undone.
It was in this moment with all hope had faded, that GWENGWYVAR daughter of the Elven king took her people spear Artimest and Challenge the white witch to a duel of life and death. But in the end Gwengwyvar the last leader of Narnian was defeated.
On her final breath she chanted a prophecy her last chant to defeat all evil
Wrong will be right, when Aslan comes in sight,
At the sound of his roar, sorrows will be no more,
When he bares his teeth, winter meets its death,
And when he shakes his mane, we shall have spring again,
When Adam's flesh and Adam's bone,
Sits at Cair Paravel in throne,
The evil time will be over and done.
But Jadis heart was easily corrupted and banished the Princess soul to another life. But the hearts a Narnia. . . have been corrupted. As a curse upon her Narnian subjects, she began the Long Winter, thus earning her well-known title, the "White Witch"
And some things that should not be forgotten . . . were lost."
...
I think I screamed.
I don't understand the story in the slightest...
I didn't read the whole thing. However, aside from the blatant plagiarism, I noticed that the Suethor was using periods where there should have been commas.
Putting aside all of the other bad signs, it's a bad sign when the author forgets what they named their...magical superswords?
Perhaps this person has been reading too much Legend of Drizzt (Gwengwyvar = Guenhwyvar?). Or maybe they're just silly.
DEFILEMENT! Suffer not the plageriser to live!
Ahem, I mean, WTH was the author thinking?! Plagerising an existing work? Tolkien (God rest him) and C.S Lewis (God rest him)are rolling in their graves! At least, if he or she is quoting or paraphrasing existing works, couldn't the author reference what they were quoting and try to avoid plagerism?
Someone kill this .... before I break out an Exterminatus order on this ... DEFILEMENT!
what is this i don't even...
...sorry, I think my brain just fused a bit there.
I want to see this die. Please, whoever writes the mission, MAKE A VERY LOUD ANNOUNCEMENT WHEN YOU'RE DONE. Because this - needs - to - DIE.
I completely agree. This needs to be sporked.
*inserts more words of loathing here*
This is a level of fail I haven't encountered in some time. I'd spork the hell out of it if I had Permission, but since I don't, I'll just think up some nice canonical ways to kill Narnia Sues.
... sometime in the foreseeable future? For you are allowed to claim a badfic before getting the actual permssion. Just make a note of it on the claimed badfic entry.
I've asked, but as of now, my request has not been confirmed or denied.
Mini in the first sentence- Professor Kirk Volunteer.
I'd love to sink my teeth into this one, but at 22K words, I can't swing this alone. Anyone interested in a team-up?
The Elvish text kind of makes it an acceptable loophole for DIC sporking, no? F&E are definitely up for this. =D
Elves in Narnia should give DIC jurisdiction. Drop me a line, and we'll coordinate.
I've got one mission waiting to be beta'd, and another I'm starting. I'll let you know as soon as I'm done with the mission I just started and we can get to sporking this one.
You can contact me at herrwozzeck@aol.com. Send an e-mail there and we'll see what goes down.
I've moved it to Claimed Badfic; hope you don't mind.
Omnomnomnom!
I... I don't even... What the hell was that?! O.e Dear God, maybe it's a good thing that prologue was deleted. Ugh! I'm kind of scared to click the link. I don't want to be scarred too badly. *shudder*