Nice. Did the Suethor fail physics or something?

I liked it. McGhee is really cute. I wonder if he'll eat fried tofu?




I found some typos and a couple of things that might or might not have have been formatting issues.


She sat down on the extra chair at his she introduced herself to him.


against the windscreen or out of the care in case of a collision.


Brakes doesn't suddenly not work and the team would have liked to know who sabotaged a federal car."


Allison grumbled and let go off the mini with her left hand.


"Who wasn't bold in the previous scene," Allison pointed out. "He had hair 'falling off to the right'."

He is a minor en most likely injured.



(The things in {} looked they might have been said in the fic, because they were single line paragraphs, but they weren't blue like the rest of the quotes. The stuff in the middle of the {} lines is just to help you place where this is from in the fic. They might not have been quotes, but I wasn't entirely sure.)

{His dad is currently doing some secret spy work.}

"Secret spy work as opposed to public spy work?" Tasmin asked.
"Perhaps in case of the latter all the bars in all the world know the spy's favourite drink. In case of the former, they don't."

{Not sure on what, its confidential.}


{Go upstairs or go home, you're off of the case.}

That was just stupid, they seemed to almost forget this was a crime investigation show.

I like the mini-LEOs. They have tons of personality. And no, I am not looking to get one.

Though I'm wondering why you chose "mini-Leos" as a name.

And sure the Eclipse was a poor choice. Looks like a nightmare to access the rear seats.