This peeve is not mission specific - I see this in most PPC missions. Few mission authors take the time to actually describe their characters. The PPC has so many characters that it takes a huge page on the wiki to list them - I don't think it would be too much to ask for a single line of description when a character shows up.

Having agents-in-training sporking a badfic MST-style is a different and interesting way to review a badfic. I also found the subplot with the other two students amusing, and I love the idea of an Ewok agent, even though it would make dialogue a little difficult on an actual mission. Plus, using one of the Original Series missions as educational material is brilliant.

I do want to point out there are a few spelling mistakes in here, though. In particular, you've got a "Mines of Moira" mini-Balrog in there. It's a great story, but reading all those misspellings kind of breaks the mood. It's probably worth your time to read through it again and get those mistakes fixed.

A very novel idea to show agents what they can expect, rather than just throwing them into their first badfic and letting them fend for themselves.