Subject: Nice mission
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Posted on: 2011-05-22 20:58:00 UTC
I still like how you include advice on how to avoid the mistakes made in the story at the end of your missions.
I saw a couple of typos.
much better off in the save (safe) and strong arms of Sheppard."
McKay and the Sue were rescued and during a scene brak (break)
Otherwise, I liked their banter this time around.
New Mission: Sheppard's Daughter. Sheppard finds out he has a daughter he never knew about. Lucky for him, someone in SGC didn't use their brain for thinking and sent her to Atlantis. Or was it lucky that agents Tasmin and Allison were sent into that SGA fic?
I still like how you include advice on how to avoid the mistakes made in the story at the end of your missions.
I saw a couple of typos.
much better off in the save (safe) and strong arms of Sheppard."
McKay and the Sue were rescued and during a scene brak (break)
Otherwise, I liked their banter this time around.
In other news. You have to keep an eye on your minis. I saw one of them in an NCIS fic that I have slated for a mission.
I liked the dialogue at the end, with the Sue responding to her accusations, and the agents rebutting. It was a good way to add more details about the problems in the abuse backstory, and also to make the Sue unwittingly admit to being an outsider to the 'verse. It wouldn't work in every mission, but I liked it here.
I would have liked it if all Sues responded to the charges made against them. They should have the right to defend themselves. But I think most Sues wouldn't have anything more intelligent to say than "you can't charge me". So usually, I have Sues not say anything.