Subject: Oh, that's much better. Thanks!
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Posted on: 2011-05-01 03:02:00 UTC
Awesome job! I love how you had to keep the Sue alive instead of killing her. Did you intend to do that from the start, or did it just happen?
~* Raven
Az and Boston get a Mini and a New Recruit!
And if anyone here wants Former Sue Chiara McLean, feel free to claim her. She's not actually all that bad, just completely out of place in 12th century England.
I would suggest that you have a beta give it a going-over next time--there were a couple of mistakes like "baring" for "bearing"--but overall, I enjoyed it very much. It's a treat to see someone else who knows Cadfael . . . though the existence of Cadfael Sues continues to baffle me.
You also took an interesting tack with the mission which I enjoyed: the obvious respect for the canon brother, to the point of possibly disobeying the Duty in order to keep a promise to him and to a deity, really underlines the purpose and commitment of the PPC. In the end, it's all about respect for the original stories. Kudos!
And I'd love to adopt Chiara, but I already have more characters than I know what to do with. XD Besides, I don't think she'd get along with the ancient Greek.
I did, actually, have about four people read through this one, but there are always things that slip through the cracks. *sigh*
But yes, I had a lot of fun doing this, and I'm glad there are at least a couple people on the 'Board who know Cadfael. If I find any more Minis, do you want one?
For some reason it seems to me that the fandom is so small and obscure that it wouldn't attract the kind of people who are interested in writing Sues. Sadly, however, this is not the last one that I have lined up. *wanders off muttering that King Stephen did not have a little sister*
Yeah, that always happens . . . I'm still finding mistakes in stories I published years ago. *facepalm*
I'd love to have a mini if you find one, though I can't promise to put him in with the rest of my agents. :D Nevertheless, I daresay I can find something for a twelfth-century monk to do . . .
I liked the twist with having to keep the Sue alive.
...it just doesn't work. :( Could you possibly change the type color to white or some other not-dark color please? I don't think my eyes can handle it, so I'm afraid I'll have to wait a bit to read the fic.
I'm sorry. That's... just something LJ seems to like to do to me. I'll go fix it.
Awesome job! I love how you had to keep the Sue alive instead of killing her. Did you intend to do that from the start, or did it just happen?
~* Raven
I went over it a couple of times, and realized that the Sue was just sort of annoying, not really bad. It was just sort of.... Meh. And then the main character was so out of it that he saw my Agents, and then one thing led to another. *shrugs*
It was fun, though!
Highlighting everything on screen makes it readable, but one more vote for a type color change, please?
Interesting mission, I've been fond of the Cadfael novels for years. I have no idea where the Suethor got the idea that anorexic would be seen as beautiful in the 12th century, Someone built like that would never survive childbirth, her relatives should have shoved her into a convent and used a normally-proportioned sister or cousin for the marriage alliance.