Ah Spyro, it has been too long since I played you. Loved the mission :)

Best part:

Lore rolled his eyes. “I think you’re overdoing it now.”

“Good!” Aster said, cracking her knuckles. “Because I have an mad, spiteful plan. And those are my best plans.”

“Wonderful!” Lore said, and then slapped her over the back of the head. “Now be quiet and listen to my idea instead.”

For that, I forgive you for the fairly drag-y story summary that preceded it.

Basically it was an enjoyable mission, that bit aside. I'm not familiar with the new Spyro stuff--I only played the first three games, and I think I only finished the first two--but still, it's dragons, and I don't take kindly to messing with dragons.

Incidentally, do you have plans for that egg?

~Neshomeh

I like what you did with Amanda and Dax...will they be showing up in later stories?

Nice mission.

I'm a fan of the original Spyro series. However, I've never really formed an opinion of the Legend series, though. Either way, even I can tell that the badfic defiled Legend's canon.

Four Mexican dogs fighting a demon lord of the dead. That sounds...unique, to say the least.

...And I know nothing about Spyro the Dragon and barely anything about Assassin's Creed. Aster and Lore amuse me.
Where is says ..."For which, PPC agents sentence you to explode as your daughter would have. Because her welfare seems only a dubious possibility in your mind, I think you may emphasize with her more after this.”... I think it should be empathize.

That was an...interesting...story concept. Not good, or logical, but interesting. I like the scene where the anthro-hell-hounds were de-glittered and recruited.

I'll say what I said in the chatroom. I like that, especially in a fic with so many awful sues and stus and such, you were able to pick out some characters that could actually be good in the hands of smarter writers. It's that little bit of constructiveness that makes this a real treat for me.

Of course, everything else seemed good too.

I...can't really think of anything more to say.