Number of words unknown, as it's a multi-chapter affair. Anyway, my first Beta, PoorCynic, has been doing well as regards spelling, grammar, and general stuff. However, both he and I have encountered certain difficulties that require a second person to work on the fic. You see, we found out that neither one of us can portray teenagers properly. Not merely that, but I'm having some slight problems with story flow, and only a few of the action scences I wrote out seemed satisfying to myself.

So, can anyone help?