Subject: In my opinion...
Author:
Posted on: 2010-11-22 23:53:00 UTC
I don't like it at all and I've just read two chapters. And if you find no Sue (I don't dare to keep on reading) it may be handed to bad slash or character protective services, whatever works for it, but please someone kill it!
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3925071/1/SexyNoJutsuGoneWrong
I'm *pretty* sure it's badfic, although I can't quite pinpoint a Mary Sue for certain (it could be that I just haven't read far enough in; it's 27 chapters, after all). Just...excreble writing, terrible characterization, and a badly-thought-out plot. Also three chapters of nothing but author's notes; vague descriptions that are tossed in at the beginning of chapters; and chapters that are mostly dialogue, with little actual discussion of what's supposed to be going on, and rapid scene transitions.
I'm not a FULL part of the PPC yet, but I can tell it is definitely bad, in chap 22, the author introduces Sasori and Kimimaru, way OOC. There might be some possession sues (characters who act COMPLETELY different) I didn’t read the whole thing. It'll definitely need an exorcism. However, that's just my opinion.
I don't like it at all and I've just read two chapters. And if you find no Sue (I don't dare to keep on reading) it may be handed to bad slash or character protective services, whatever works for it, but please someone kill it!