Sorry you've been waiting so long for a reply, but I haven't had time to come to the Board much lately, and it looks like the other PGs are in the same boat.

At a glance, your writing sample looks very good - no glaring technical errors and an easy-to-read style. It's a bit fast-paced, but that's a personal choice, however I'll point out that a bad title isn't a killing offense, even if it contains a typo.

The descriptions you've given for your agents here in your request are very, very short, and don't tell me anything about what fandoms they work in or how long they've been in the PPC, but are remarkably thorough nonetheless, and between that and your sample itself, I've got a pretty good idea of how you plan to write them, and they look good - nothing (too) insane, nice contrast, good interactions.

However, you may not know that Cassie Young is one of our until-recently-regular Boarders, and has written a lot of missions with her Agent Cassie; while this itself isn't a reason to change your agent's name, beware that it could become very, very confusing, both for your characters and Boarders. In your place, I'd rename that agent or give her a nickname that she can be referred to most of the time.

In any case, everything looks good, so Permission Granted :) Go forth and write!


(As a non-Permission-related note, PPC missions on FF.N tend to be taken down as soon as someone notices, as, strictly speaking, they do violte FF.N's TOS. You may want to find somewhere else to post.)