I don't understand the rape=love thing either. Not that it would be a Sherlock Holmes story, but if they had changed the names and used the same set up, it could have been an interesting story, but instead they went off into how much being harassed, attacked, and tortured made the Priest fall in love.

I really did have to stop a lot on this fic. I started it as their fourth mission, but kept putting it off to do something less NSFB. What finally got me through it was realizing how over the top Watson's dialogue was. Once I realized that, I could get some distance from it, and do the mission.

I'm glad that the mission took the turns it did. The whole something's wrong with Kelok, and therefore Unger gets to shine in this one, was not actually planned ahead. I realized I had written Kelok really out of character, and instead of going back to put him in character, I made myself think of a reason for him being OOC.

I hope that someone adopts David, and he gets to have a long and productive career in the PPC.

Heh :) Anyway, I liked the way you found a place for the See-through Device; when I dug that out of the archives I had no idea anybody would ever find it useful! But with Unger's illiteracy, it's perfect. Also, I suppose, in cases of bad grammar manifesting in ways that can't be predicted by just reading the Words.

Unger is very, very lucky he didn't meet Lux... Actually, they were very lucky they weren't spotted by the character replacements; the SEP field wouldn't have done squat if they'd been properly noticed. Not to mention the sanity drain of the whole horrid thing--this is the kind of fic that sends agents insane (or KIA) and yours just survived it--kudos to them for that, for sure! (And to you, for putting yourself through it. That kind of fic just NEEDS to be killed.)

Thought it was especially offensive the way they had the characters throw the Bible to the ground. Putting aside all the questions about whether that would ever be in character, it's as though the author's implying that if you're gay you can't be Christian and if you're Christian you automatically hate gay people... or something. I mean, HELLOO!!! It's total bunk. I'm about as Christian as it gets and neither I nor most of the Christians I know reject gays; it's just the idiotic Westboro types who give us all that bad reputation. I feel like the author just accused me of hating people for no good reason and it's not a good feeling, y'know?

Rant over...

I wonder who's going to adopt David? He sounds like he wouldn't be very happy about being in the DMS, with his timid nature; maybe DBS--a heavy dose of Bad Slash's status quo welcome to non-straight people might do him a lot of good. Is anybody running a DBS agent in need of a partner?

Does Kelok have issues with feeding on Sue so often? Seems to me he should be getting regular medical checkups to make sure his glitter levels stay low... not that he'd mind, I imagine... :)

nom nom nom! I love chocolate. I'm glad you enjoyed yourself that really makes my day to hear things like that.

I don't understand it either, but it is disturbingly common. Well, I guess the really disturbing thing would be the comments a story like this one recieved. The most memorable for me was something along the lines of, "Wow! I loved the long slow seduction. You are my favorite author for romance."

And I was making this face oO or this one maybe Oo.

David might still be around you go for Permission. Who knows.

Since we're not allowed to talk about the authors, I will just say, again, you have an amazing constitution for these things. Thank you for including the "something wrong with Kelok" subplot to help detract from the priest stuff. Watching Unger take charge of the situation at the end was cool.