I don't think the author's very good at figures of speech. It should be "put (her country/his desire for immortality) before all", I'm pretty sure.

Also, was Evangelia a common Greek and/or Trojan name? Somehow I'm slightly doubtful on that score.

The movie was okay. Either way, that fic sounds awful. Someone kill it dead, please.

I am not a very big and this still scares me.

This is just a list of things I spotted that bug me:

1) It's Peninsula of Haemus or Chersónēsos tou Haímou if you want to stay in Greek, not Balkan Peninsula. That term was first used in the late 1400s and was not common until the 1800s.

2) Andromache was not a daughter of Zuse, the old thunderbolt normally did not favor his mortal offspring, and he would never give them or their decedents immortality.

3) Evangelia is a rare variant Evangeline. Evangeline is an old Greek name, but not that old.

4) Can't prove it, but fairly sure Damien is a modern name. it does have French/Greek origins, but I cannot find a reference connecting it to Troy.

And this was just in the first 300 words.

Then again I cannot talk much considering I like a Harry Potter Firefly crossover. In my defense it is well written and, as impossible as that may sound, stays loyal to both source materials.