Subject: Permission granted!
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Posted on: 2010-08-19 22:08:00 UTC

I noticed some misplaced italic tags, and there are a couple of places where you slip into Roger's thoughts without marking them, but that's easily fixed. I noticed it at the following locations:

Paragraph 1: "Anne's up early as usual."

Paragraph 7: "Maybe I'll go back to Tolkien for a bit and finish it later."

And this, toward the end of the interview with the Marquis, is italicized when it shouldn't be: "It rummaged in its desk and withdrew a sheaf of papers."

But, again, that's just HTML stuff--no big deal. The actual writing is really good and I look forward to seeing more of it in the future. {= )

~Neshomeh

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