Subject: No
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Posted on: 2010-06-05 02:43:00 UTC
I was just a commenter, and we had a conversation about it. Trust me, if I were her beta, she wouldn't have grammar issues.
Subject: No
Author:
Posted on: 2010-06-05 02:43:00 UTC
I was just a commenter, and we had a conversation about it. Trust me, if I were her beta, she wouldn't have grammar issues.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5964797/1/
Don't tell the author I posted this. She's very nice and I don't want to insult her. It's not terrible, but it is tenth walker and Mary-Sue-ish, though she hadn't chosen who the romance will be with yet (Legolas, Boromir, or Gimli). What will really get you is the tense. Oh, the tense. I think it gets worse in later chapters, so be patient.
If you want your agents to go crazy with tense shifts, PPC this story.
P.S. We worked out the Turin issue. She was confused, but she did try. So cut her some slack there, please.
It's not our policy to tell authors we are criticising their work, and we make a point of only ranting about the content of stories, not the writers.
A question, though; you said "we worked out the Turin issue" - do you mean you're her beta-reader?
I must say, the fact she can keep track of her version of Elvish is a feat.
But "Of course it is and don't you forget it!"?
I didn't so much hear Tolkien spinning in his grave as feel him whirling. And I'm not following this whole Celeste/Menelwen thing.
Estel?! You're joking right? It's Elessar. I've never seen the name Estel come up in LotR before, and while it has been a while since I read it, I'd hope I'd remember something like that.
Estel is the name he goes by while growing up in Rivendell, IIRC. It means "hope". He didn't take the name Elessar until it was pretty clear that he was going to become king.
If it makes you feel better, it probably isn't mentioned more than once if at all outside the appendices. {= )
~Neshomeh, who used to be able to list all of Aragorn's names at one point. No, she is not a fangirl, why do you ask?
At least it's a fangirl pointing it out :P
Like I said, I haven't read the books for a long time, and I generally skipped through most of the Appendices to reach the Timelines and Family Trees.
Besides, I knew all about the name "Estel", too.
Also, I was kinda joking about being a fangirl in the first place, being well-aware of the drooling, glomping connotations as I am. ^_~
Perhaps fangeek would be a better term for the non-drooling type, combining the fan's obsessiveness with the geek's deep knowledge of subject matter...?
~Neshomeh
There are negative connotations for "geek" in the non-fandom-loving world, but no one here will care, methinks. "Fangeek" has my support - I shall endeavour to use it whenever possible. :)
A fangirl is a squeeing, drooling, Suefic-writing mass of hormones. A fan who happens to be female is quite another thing, and quite likely to know more about Aragorn than you can shake a stick at while also having the ability to avoid glomping the poor fellow, which one assumes is an ability that Neshomeh possesses.
I was just a commenter, and we had a conversation about it. Trust me, if I were her beta, she wouldn't have grammar issues.