Subject: I'd like to help
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Posted on: 2009-04-11 01:54:00 UTC
Big fan of Alan Moore, and I know his stories very well. To be honest, though, I'm not seeing too much fleshed out considering your character. I'd love to beta read and help you out if I knew more.
All right, I was reading fanfics written by Rorschach Suethors and I ended up creating this idea. I was thinking that a girl gets saved by Rorschach and creates this fantasy in her head where she's a princess and he's her knight in shining armor. In reality, he couldn't care less about her and thinks of her as nothing more than a stalker whore. Unfortunately, she doesn't get the hint and let's just say this fanfic does not have a happy ending. Here are my OCs if you're interested. I want to make sure they're not Sues.
The psycho stalker
http://community.livejournal.com/ocanalysis/357612.html
The best friend
<a href="http://community.livejournal.com/ocanalysis/357612.html">http://community.livejournal.com/oc_analysis/357612.html
Oh, sorry, I thought you were responding to something else. So, you're saying that I should write the fanfic? Just want to make sure.
Or I'm going to hunt you down and feed you to the tall ships. Whatev is very hungry these days, and Krisp is getting bored. Maybe South will be here to watch the show, too.
Okay, but I have to warn you that it's still under development and I want to make sure it's perfect before I post it.
As long as you post it someday... Well, I still don't want to portal to this time in order to still be alive to read.
Don't worry, it won't be that long, but I'd rather take my time with it and post a good fanfic rather than rush it and post a crappy one. That's why this community exists in the first place.
So, you're the one who's going to be tearing this thing apart?
Big fan of Alan Moore, and I know his stories very well. To be honest, though, I'm not seeing too much fleshed out considering your character. I'd love to beta read and help you out if I knew more.
Sorry, but I already have a beta-reader. However, I would love to hear your suggestions.
I'd need to look at a more fleshed out character profile.
My email is chase.productions @ yahoo . com
Okay, thank you. Exactly what kind of fleshed out profile did you have in mind?
That there's any real formula to a fleshed out character profile, though usually when I do write one it tends to depend on how much I need to keep for reference while I continue the story.
I think it's more important for an Original Character rather than a canon for the fact that in most cases people who know the fandom know the character like the back of their hand. And you would figure that it should be more likely for someone making up their own character, but the originality and the familiarity one may have with a new character may go through different stages, just like someone would go through multiple edits on a story.
I don't know if you'd find it overkill, but I would start with a biography for her, describing some times in her past, little things that may give you something to draw from or to derive how she would act in a given situation. A quick sheet of the effects of nature and nurture that everyone should have to make a person who they are.
Things like her age, which could help you figure out how her dialogue should go.
Then keep it on hand when you do write your story, and keep the Watchmen volume with you as well. I would also suggest jumping into a little bit of V for Vendetta to get Alan Moore's dialogue style for both characters: they're both very set in a particular moral base but you can almost compare the two and be able to figure that they're not going to sound alike. While both are vigilantes, V does not look at particular people under a microscope, unlike Rorschach.
Sorry, kind of droned on there, I hope you got what I was going for in there.
Well, I already have some of her background planned. I just didn't want to put too much information in the OC_Analysis because I didn't want to give any spoilers away. Not to sound rude, but I have discussed Rachel's more fleshed out background with a beta-reader and she is very good at pointing out Sues. She even has her own livejournal account that's soul purpose is sporking Ledger!Joker Sues. Plus, I kind of want to hint to my character's background throughout the story while exploring the depths of her sanity. When Rachel's sanity is completely shattered, the story ends. I'm just glad that you see some potential in my character. It means that you don't think she's a Sue.
The profile would be for your benefit and your beta reader's alone. I'm not saying post the whole thing on your livejournal, especially if you're trying to weave a story that is majorly based on your character development. I stand by my suggestion that it would greatly benefit you to do that, though it's up to you whether you do or not.
But I can't give my opinion based on what you do have as to whether she's a Sue or not. Your beta-reader sounds very qualified in deciding which is good. Go with that and take heed to his/her advice; I haven't met an Alan Moore fan yet that has completely missed the point.
I wish you good luck with this, it'd be great to read a successful OC Watchmen fic.
Thank you. I wasn't going to write this at first, but my beta-reader insisted I write the fanfic, because its primary purpose is to show the effect of mad obsessive love on people.
I know nothing about Watchmen, so I can't help you there.
I would just like to point out that, due to the nature of the Board, it isn't very polite to keep making fresh topics every time you have something new to say. You could have added this to either one of the two topics you already have on the front page.
Yeah, I didn't find out about that until after I posted it. It was a rookie mistake and I'm not about to make it again.