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Posted on: 2009-04-08 02:59:00 UTC
http://www.fanfiction.net/r/3952344/
I was very polite. He doesn't sound unintelligent; just reluctant to learn from critique. {= P Oh well.
Anyway, I don't think it's been PPC'd. Have fun with the run-on sentences and the lack of punctuation in general.
~Neshomeh
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3952344/1/Enough
Has this fic been PPC'd yet? I know one of this guy's other fanfics got taken care of by Agents Redd and Jill Greenleaf, and yet another of his stories was MST'd by Lycaenion, but I want to do this one.
At least this one didn't have a talking blood-drinking sword or unintentionally make the hero sound like a paedophile ...
According to Lycaenion, it also made him sound like a necrophile, homosexual, and Oedipus Rex.
*headwalls* blood omen was also bad... somehow, he made a wooden bow in a forge... clearly didn't actually make an attempt to find out what ebony actually is... he thought it was metal and that makes less sense because you can't make a bow out of metal. But then, Jill Greenleaf already ranted and screamed about that.
... having that number of fetishes is perfectly normal among furry characters, though generally their authors actually INTEND them to be there.
Also made him sound like a rapist. I quote, "now feel the pain that so many innocent young girls like her have felt before but with oh so much more intensity". And apart from his list of weird paraphilias, he must also have the lung capacity of a whale to be able to say all that in one breath.
That probably wasn't the ideal thing to start reading in the morning. Writing like that makes my inner grammar-stickler collapse motionless.
Make it go away! Ah! I know! I will send the link to my English teacher and see what she thinks of it. should be interesting.
Make sure she knows YOU didn't write it.
This kind of fic would probably make my English teacher succumb to the Bloodwrath. According to him, if you can't even use spell check or punctuation correctly, you don't deserve to be taken seriously as a writer. But I think the PPC has established that many, many times.
I am going to ask her what she thought about it tomorrow.
The sentence structure (or lack thereof) of this fic reminds me of Legolas by Laura.
Kill. It.
There are no capital letters in "legolas by laura."
^_~
~Neshomeh
I think it falls under grammar. But yes, indeed, you're right. :P
I wonder if capitalization is always grammar, though. Sometimes caps or no caps can differentiate between two different things rather than just indicating the function of one thing. For example, Earth is not the same thing as earth. I'd call that a matter of spelling, because the first character marks each word as distinct from the other. On the other hand, the word "on" at the beginning of this sentence carries the same meaning with a lowercase "o," so the capitalization serves the strictly grammatical purpose of marking the first word of the sentence.
It may be different in different languages, too. I know that all nouns are always capitalized in German, so in that case it's definitely linked to grammar.
It's an interesting question.
~Neshomeh
I love these sorts of questions.
In some ways I guess capitalisation falls under punctuation, because it exists at the start of a sentence in order to give clarity, the same way that commas, full stops and so on do - they don't change the meaning of the word either (strictly speaking; if a sentence ran on with no commas it could get ambiguous, but to keep it simple...). On the other hand, the apostrophe is definitely a punctuation mark, but it does change the meaning of the word in a similar way to how "Earth" and "earth" are different.
So where do we draw the lines? :D
http://www.fanfiction.net/r/3952344/
I was very polite. He doesn't sound unintelligent; just reluctant to learn from critique. {= P Oh well.
Anyway, I don't think it's been PPC'd. Have fun with the run-on sentences and the lack of punctuation in general.
~Neshomeh
The woman he viscously raped and enslaved?
Ha ha ha ha...