Subject: ack, that didn't come out right
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Posted on: 2009-01-31 12:54:00 UTC
Many apologies. Was extremely drunk when I posted last night, and Pan Galactics turn me into a very unpleasant person. Forgive me being needlessly harsh?
I wrote a pretty good poem (or at least that's what everyone says it is, I still think it's a super short story) a few days ago that I'm pretty proud of. Take a look!
http://zoe9.livejournal.com/2124.html#cutid1
~Zoe~
I confess, it didn't get me. The second stanza's exclamation mark looked like a plea for comedy. The rest looked... fairly designed to provoke a specific reaction, to be honest.
Many apologies. Was extremely drunk when I posted last night, and Pan Galactics turn me into a very unpleasant person. Forgive me being needlessly harsh?
I like to hear the honest truth on my writing. How else can I improve?
~Zoe~
I'm reminded of Shylock's speech from the Merchant Of Venice, which would be appropriate, actually. [/random Shakespeare reference]
This is haunting, eloquent. You grow up listening to stories of the Holocaust every year... the names of the camps are fixed in your memory, and the number 'six million,' but it's different like that, less tangible.
There's just something eerie about this. Definitely submit it to something.
-Lycaenion, who has now started rambling too much for her own good