All of it! But particularly the 'Time Lord Academy reunion', and how you handled the Fisherman's interaction with the Doctor. Great stuff, now to get writing about what happened to those ypurs...

A lovely interlude, Ms. Winterwood!

... that if you want feedback as you write it, it's best to put it on the Board as you go along. Whether you put it in a new thread or as an extension of this one (since you hijacked it anyway ;)) is down to you.

hS

Seriously well done!

And it was cool to see that the Fisherman got a mention as one of the other Time Lords to have crashed into the PPC. I shall have to write up what he and Evie got up to during the blackout...

The only reason I haven't reviewed before is that I'm not very familiar with Doctor Who, so I can't comment on much in the story - except that I understood it all up till the end with the cocky American guy. That shows a lot of skill on your part, because like I said, my knowledge of Doctor Who is shaky. It's basically cobbled together from references on the Internet and from listening to friends talk about it.

So, yeah. Good job!

I didn't expect anyone to write a story because of my post, but... Wow.

Jack Harkness, what /do/ you think you're doing? XD Lovely conclusion, Lily!

You used the Daleks-playing-Cluedo idea! And that scene was the best, the best!
DALEKS ARE SUPREME AT CLUEDO. (busts up laughing again)

I'll get to Wikia-updating right away! To the edit button!

By the way, Morgan says that she "doesn't like having a home". That should probably be "doesn't like not having a home". Just a final typo there.

This whole story was 100% pure awesomeness. And now, I'm afraid that the Doctor too has to go on the "canon characters that know about the PPC" list.

The bad thing is, the Doctor Who authors are so quick to say "sure, why not?" that they might make this story canon if they find and like it.


And now I have more plot points for my Agents, as Nikki is assuming that they might die in a year's time... and Sergio too is making that assumption, as he already lost friends in the past.

And I'm not saying it because my Agents are in it, I swear! (Though I liked how you handled them)

Three small mistakes about them, though:

- The rifle is called M82A1, not M281. Also, Sergio can't fire it while standing (it has to be fired from its bipod while prone), but we can justify it as Rule of Cool.
We had the Doctor fighting alongside our Agents, after all. Nothing beats that in coolness.
- It's Nikki Cherryflower, not Cherryblossom. I did think about calling her that, but I decided against it as it would have been too blatant. (She's a clone of Sakura Kinomoto, and "Sakura" has the meaning of "cherry blossom")
- Nikki is the grenade specialist, not Sergio. It's fairly minor (Sergio can use grenades too), but I think it would be nice to make her do something.

I loved how the old-timey dialogue from the Transfictional Canonical Defense Authority members was interspersed with modern-style grievances against the PPC technology. Ah, DoSAT. Even given the vast probabilistic distance between multiverses, you still never change.

The Doctor's description mentioned that he had braces. Unless that's dialect for "suspenders" or he got injured in one of the Series Seven episodes I didn't watch yet, that may be a phrasing problem.
Also, which continuum's wraiths/Wraiths was Eledhwen referring to?

So the Mongoose Shelter is finally mentioned somewhere. I was never sure what it was for, but it's nice to know that it still exists. I only wonder where all of the mongooses come from? There can't be that many spawned by Phrasing Mishaps.

Ah, so there was a showdown after all! Well, a showdown of sorts, but a showdown that's solved by a grenade and a Time Lord throwing playground jibes is still a showdown. Will that instance of the Reality Room still work after this? The Room's properties would make the grenade explosion actually leave permanent damage. Not structural damage, because it's still HQ, but it'd be nasty.

Frost is back! And the Doctor has trapped the meatloaf monster in the Reality Room! With an explosive!

I rather like the digestive enzyme theory. It's quite plausible, and certainly nothing I would have thought of. (If anything, I'd have someone try to eat it, then get eaten themself >.>)

Since most people seem to have come to an agreement to make this PPC canon, I'm going to start updating the involved characters' Wikia pages, but I don't want to have to say "This character appears in Parts (Applicable Numbers)", and add maybe a half-dozen links to a page when one might do.

I'd been hoping for a chapter focused on dealing with Slorp by itself, but that probably won't happen now that it's subsumed the Weeping Angel. Still, this installment turned out great, especially due to Morgan. In fact, both of the Time Lords had some great scenes this time around.

Now I want to write a followup featuring the last of the fleeing ypur flock when I get Permission. Wait, is it a herd? A pack? What are groups of ypur called?

At last! A character of mine who doesn't read like all my other characters!

It's actually really interesting to see how someone else writes Morgan III, particularly given the current lack of source material (in fact, you've just written the source material). I enjoyed the dialogue about the fall of Gallifrey and the segue into Sues - and also this:

“Sues can be rewritten,” retorted the Doctor.

“But when they’re rewritten, they’re not the same Sue.”

Which reminds me both of the Doctor's favourite tagline, of River's response ("Not those times. Not one line! Don't you dare!"), and of Gandalf and Saruman's exchange about the colour of Saruman's robes:

"I liked white better," I said.

"White!" he sneered. "It serves as a beginning. White cloth may be dyed. The white page can be overwritten; and the white light can be broken."

"In which case it is no longer white," said I.

(And who said there's no humour in Lord of the Rings?)

I also really like your A/V techs - I can tell they're from the same Department-sorry-Division as Adam and Frenchie. And... oh dear stars, now you've put the thought of a meeting between Captain Jack and Agent Lux in my head... or worse, an alliance...

hS

I am loving this crossover so much. The Meatloaf Monster is perfectly crazy for HQ, and the inclusion of the steam-punk universe is going to make things extra interesting. The meeting of the Time Lords was great, and while more hostile then I expected the meeting to be, it made perfect sense.

Actually, speaking of the parallel universe barrier falling: could the Enforcers of the Plot Continuum be trying to get in? Or successfully getting in? That might be interesting, to see the Doctor fight a Mary Sue without being brainwashed by their Aura of Smooth. I know the Doctor have enough problems to deal with, but it may be interesting. Just a thought.

You know, I think I may have to write a blackout story after all. You brought in the timberwolves, so now I'm seeing the Everfree Forest attached to HQ, and Marvin and Printworthy have to go around and try to calm, or destroy, the beasties. After all, they are members of the All Purpose: My Little Pony devision. Then they can come across some Aperture Science hallways, perhaps with GLaDOS trying to extend her reach over HQ. That could be interesting.
(Says the guy who still has not finished the first mission. Or sent the interlude to be beta read yet...)

Until the next update, I will sit back and try to write. Real Life gets in the way far too often.

It's such a pity that the RP thread started and ended while I was on holiday without internet, otherwise I would have joined in. I had some ideas about part of DTE being in Knightmare (possibly related to the magic mechanic of that series: literal spellcasting, where you have to spell out the spell to cast it, e.g. "Spellcasting: T-E-L-E-P-O-R-T" for a teleport spell). You bet Eagrus would approve of magic like that.

And now, I realized something else. I started the whole kinda-roleplay using my Agents... two of which, for reasons that are currently under spoilers, shouldn't actually be in HQ anymore in April 2013.

But this timey-dimensional wimey stuff explains that just fine. I'm also picturing Agent!Sergio trying to blast a Weeping Angel's head into pieces with his Barret M82A1, with Nikki in tow complaining about the mess that her birthday had become... since they are from April 1st, 2012

And now I should stop. Using them to play around with the April 1st joke led to a chain of events causing this to start. Next thing I know, they actually run into the Doctor and his new companions, and things go even more downhill.

I swear, I take my mind's eye off of him for one second, and the next thing I know he's been chased off a cliff, tried to out-taunt the French Taunter, accidentally portalled to Eroticon VI-- he swears it was a mistake-- or trying to pet a Baneling.

Lovely job. Your character interactions are top-notch and I particularly enjoyed that confidential bit between the Doctor and Christianne.

That's kind of an obscure reference, now that I think about it, so feel free to ignore it.

Oh, yes, Agent Omicron shows up somewhere! I've always wanted to see him used. He showed up in literally a single sentence in his only other appearance, which was disappointing. One of the only Daleks in HQ to survive the Crashing Down, and nobody seemed to care.
I can just see the Doctor running into him and Agent Charlie(a Classic Who Imperial Dalek; he showed up in one of Tawaki's missions and never appeared again) sliding down a hallway, talking shop. And, of course, for two Daleks, talking shop is almost always going to be about efficient methods for murder, but then again, that's shop talk for most Assassins.

The dialogue with the Doctor and the Cafeteria Workers was absolute gold, even though I didn't recognize any of the Workers. That's quality right there. But you shouldn't have called the monster Mister Meatloaf... now I'm getting ALF flashbacks...

If the dimensional junctures have increased to the point that the AUs start interlocking, I hope it's not going to get to the point where they start running into the outer edges of the Mirror Multiverse. Having steampunk doubles would already invoke some crazy dimensional reacharounds, but the possibility of having brainwashed Sue-fused doubles in addition to that would just get everything much nastier much more quickly, and the Doctor's got enough on his plate (Hey! a pun!) with the-cafeteria-beast-that-shall-not-be-named.

The one-department-only Cafeterias probably wouldn't be enmeshed enough into HQ's systems to black out the entire complex, and so the smaller ones would probably be restricted to their individual areas.

Plus, if a canon character tried to bust into... say, the DIA's headquarters for example, claiming he'd dropped in through a rip in space and ask to be led to their Cafeteria... well, I shouldn't need to say what the Agents would do in response, but in case you were wondering, it includes the words "high-powered tranquilizer".

Especially in all the Doctor-visits-Tolkien/Rowling/Lewis sorts of fics. I know at least one Potterwho fic has the premise that Rowling has a subconscious psychic link to the Wizarding world that allowed her to create Harry Potter.

I mean sometimes it might even seem feasible. When I write, I like to picture the action happening in my head. It can, sometimes, feel extremely realistic, like it's actually happening somewhere.

I do remember coming up with some kind of a fungus that ran it. I believe it's still floating around the wiki, somewhere.

Sometimes they just turn blue for no good reason.

Fixed the spacing error. And oh gosh, yes, old men having tea and smoking pipes and discussing foreign languages. It makes so much sense.

Now I'm stuck on what exactly in the Cafeteria would be draining all of that energy. I don't want to use a Cybermat; there's more than just Whovians running around HQ, I'm sure.