Subject: Right.
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Posted on: 2008-11-29 01:58:00 UTC
In that case, "vorcel hawk" is on the menu, and my character's going to have a nice green lightsaber to play with. What a pity: the writing wasn't half bad...
Subject: Right.
Author:
Posted on: 2008-11-29 01:58:00 UTC
In that case, "vorcel hawk" is on the menu, and my character's going to have a nice green lightsaber to play with. What a pity: the writing wasn't half bad...
This is not about the definition of Sues. Instead, I have a question about what seperates a merely poor fic from one PPC-worthy. This fic caused me to write this:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4567793/1/WindwalkerFirstTest
Its main character, Kyranon Ilaren, is the daughter of a police group called the Starhawks. She is naturally force-sensitive and is the daughter of Jinn. Other offenses include being the Chosen One of her subgroup, using the Dark side as well as the light and claiming immunity to corruption (although this charge is dubious due to canonical precedent), creating a race of force-sensitive, sentient Cute Animal Friends, stating that her Starhawks saved the Jedi and saved them from the Sith in the distant past, mucking with the timeline and Jedi policy on marriage, using techniques reserved for Masters in the canonical timeline, being more powerful than any other Padawan, and having her character's mother intimidate the Council.
Despite all this, and the occasional bad description, the fic is much better written than the usual tripe in the Pit, and there are some redeeming elements. The Starhawks upstage the jedi, but they would fit perfectly in their own fic. In short, they appear to have been grafted into the Warsverse.
My question is as follows: is the above fic bad enough to PPC? I'm somewhat undecided...
You mentioned the biggest problem yourself: "The Starhawks upstage the [J]edi." Upstaging the canon characters is the trait all Sues have in common. Everything else just serves to make it worse. The fact that the Sue's group would work well in their own fic just means that the writer would have done better to write an original story.
As for whether or not it's PPC-able, that depends on whether or not you think it would make an entertaining mission for someone.
~Neshomeh