Yay! by
Neshomeh
on 2013-07-27 15:43:00 UTC
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I enjoyed both stories. ^^
I would have liked to see what happened at the party, but I guess it was just about how they made it happen at all, after Crashing Down. As such, it works well: everyone's reactions to the invitation are unique and say something about them as people. I did half-expect the whole thing to mushroom until half of HQ was invited, but I'm also glad it didn't, since it would've been the obvious thing. Not-obvious is good.
As for "Hello, Hello!", again, I enjoyed it, as I said before, and it was a good read, a very good read. ^~ ... I wonder if the DRD and RDR ever get together for social functions. Just imagine the conversations they could have!
~Neshomeh
LOL! by
son_of_heaven176
on 2013-07-27 01:27:00 UTC
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Wow...talk about a disappointing newbie!
Re: Stories by
doctorlit
on 2013-07-26 21:10:00 UTC
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I admit I didn't totally remember everyone from Crashing Down who appears in "Winding Down," but I do remember how tense Crashing Down was, and all the suffering that happened. So "Winding Down" was exactly what its title says: a moment of calm and a return to normalcy for the characters involved. That made it feel good to read, even if I didn't specifically remember the history of each character. One typo, in the scene where Constance invites Steve: "There were more important things to thing about, though."
"Hello, Hello!" makes an excellent companion piece to "Greetings and Hello." I like how the Cilantro's "identity" is kept ambiguous, and also the fact that the two departments have such intriguingly similar circumstances occurring. I want to hear Haar and Orinoco have a conversation together, now (assuming they aren't the same robot getting job duties mixed up, although the Cilantro's comment about Orinoco's recruitment makes that unlikely). One typo: In the sentence where Orinoco first gives his(?) name, he refers to himself as "Orinico" at the end.