Looks great! (nm)

First Mission! by Lycaenion on 2008-07-15 22:27:00 UTC Reply

Yes, this is rather abrupt, but it was a very short fic (mercifully) and I started working on it immediately after I gained Permission. Probably took about five hours or so; did most of it yesterday, edited and finished it today.
:/

The mission and a link to the fic sporked are here, at the Freewebs site:

http://www.freewebs.com/teekandcrebaina/themissions.htm

(Thanks to those deserving of them, and the proper disclaimers, are also included.)

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*dittoes everyone's "well done"* by Tasari on 2008-07-18 08:03:00 UTC Reply

Though I would have added "causing Draco Malfoy to wear 'pants and boxers' instead of trousers and pants." ^_^
Well done! by Tomato on 2008-07-17 01:44:00 UTC Reply

Your agents have a great dynamic, and your writing is solid. Definitely a good first mission.

April would like to know if Crebaina has had any problem with the disguise generator and Aeron. The generator in RC 1701 tends to squish Fitch into April's shoulder.

Hm... by Lycaenion on 2008-07-17 17:53:00 UTC Reply

...Well, seeing as, despite the connection, human and dæmon are still in two separate forms, I figured that the generator would just work on Crebaina.

You could go a little more metaphysical and say something like that since the dæmon is something more akin to one's spirit or nature, and since the disguise generator only changes one's outward appearance, something like that wouldn't be affected, not being part of your material body...

...I'll stop now. *drags brain back to reality*

(And he could have a far more obtrusive or attention-getting settled form, so I didn't think a crow on her shoulder would be too much of a problem.)

But Crebaina and Aeron would like to make their sympathy for April and Fitch known; Aeron would also like to inquire what Fitch's settled form is.

But anyway, thanks for the praise. :) I'm actually rather eager to find more badfic, just so I can keep writing and developing them more. And also kill Sues.

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Fitch is a magpie. by Tomato on 2008-07-17 18:54:00 UTC Reply

The generator is supposed to work like that. April's has been malfunctioning for years. (It's all her own fault; on her first day with it, she took it apart to find out how it worked and it has hated her ever since.) She's glad to hear that Crebaina's is working properly.

*shameless self-pluggage* If you're interested, you can find my introduction to April and Fitch here: http://www.freewebs.com/rc1701/mission1.htm Yes, I know the font's doing strange things.

Ohhh... by Lycaenion on 2008-07-17 19:07:00 UTC Reply

Aeron is pleased at the kinship. For the record (since I, too, am dying to plug something I've thought up), Aeron is a crow because they symbolize, among other things, trickery, boldness, cunning, understanding things related to ethics, knowledge, and "moving freely in the void."

Crebaina came here through a plothole, has become rather scarily obsessed with Enlightenment philosophy, and the rest is self-explanatory.
(Although, I found the bit about the void after deciding on the plothole idea, and I'd already chosen his form before that. Decidedly creepy.)

I was right? *controls urge to dance about in glee*
Now that I think on it, Crebaina probably would have done that, but either Aeron cautioned her out of it, or she remembered that all this stuff was integral to her task.
(One could delve into her backstory and say that one day she probably took apart something equally complicated in her father's lab, which did not end well.)

I... actually just finished reading that about half an hour ago. Because I remembered your LJ username and looked it up. Er, heh heh. Heh. But thanks.

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Cool. by Tomato on 2008-07-17 20:34:00 UTC Reply

Fitch is a magpie because they have an attraction to shiny things and take stuff that doesn't belong to them.

April knew the generator was important, but her general attitude towards such things is "I'm a scientist. I can put it back together." Forgetting that her area of scientific expertise is chemistry.

Cool! by Adagio on 2008-07-16 19:34:00 UTC Reply

Very good on your first mission. Can't wait to see more of your Agents! I'm guessing there will be much conflict.

Now, onto the mission itself: Yuck. Brainless bad smut is never fun. Still, you handled it well, so good job.

^w^ by Lycaenion on 2008-07-16 22:16:00 UTC Reply

Thanks! And yes, you guessed right.

Crebaina thinks Teek is immature, rash, and far too hyper; plus, she can't stand her tastes in music, but Teek insists on hooking up her iPod to whatever's available and blasting Queen after every successful mission.

Teek, meanwhile, is jealous of Crebaina's dæmon and the fact that she's from another world, and thinks she's too cold and haughty. (It doesn't help that Crebaina's natural expression is rather arrogant, but it's just the way her face seems.)
To make matters even worse, she tried to pet François the iguana, who promptly bit her.

They'll probably have to be firmly bonded through strife; i.e. REALLY terrible badfic.

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I enjoyed this. by Cassie Cameron-Young on 2008-07-16 17:25:00 UTC Reply

The mission was entertaining, and the agents are nice, average ones. I hope to have mine bump into them at some point.

Dare I ask for your googlemail or MSN address?

:) by Lycaenion on 2008-07-16 19:19:00 UTC Reply

I'm hoping to make them less average as time goes on, but eh, first mission, characterisation isn't going to be totally formed yet.
I would like to meet your agents as well; you're the second person to say that so far, actually- how would one set up that sort of thing?

You may certainly have my googlemail:

lycaenion@gmail.com

(easy enough, 'ey?)

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Looks great! (nm) by Laburnum on 2008-07-16 17:02:00 UTC Reply
Nice; I enjoyed that by Sedri on 2008-07-16 01:13:00 UTC Reply

I particularly like that you've made them opposite sorts in terms of which books they've read. And that badfic... bleh. Dreadful. Thank you for killing it.

Good job!

*tips her hat* by Lycaenion on 2008-07-16 01:50:00 UTC Reply

Dreadful it was, indeed.
Well, I didn't just want to go ahead with the standard, where the Agents meet and discover they like most all the same things.
So Crebaina still thinks Teek is a little rash and silly, and Teek still resents Crebaina's aloofness and tendency to retreat into herself, so to speak.

But much thanks, I'm glad you liked it. :)

Indeed. Contrast is always good. Makes life interesting. (nm) by Sedri on 2008-07-16 06:49:00 UTC Reply

Great work! by Artic Blade on 2008-07-16 13:59:00 UTC Reply

And I mean it. There were a few things in that story that caused momentary muscle twitches, but luckily, you took care of that. Good work, and congratz on the first mish!

Agreed on the twitching. by Lycaenion on 2008-07-16 19:22:00 UTC Reply

Does it seem at all possible that the author is a Draco and/or Tom Felton fanbrat?
*bashes head against wall*

I don't know if I hate mindless fornication!Hermione any more or less than the version that just likes buying Muggle designer clothes. Why is her characterisation so hard for Suethors?

Oh, sorry, Earth Logic takes some time to throw off completely. *sigh*

Thanks for the compliments. :) *tips hat* I hope to embark on a long career of killing badfic from here on in.

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