Subject: In the PPC Lounge...
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Posted on: 2008-06-26 01:13:00 UTC

Agent Supernumerary looked Savitri and Leo up one way and down the other and raised an eyebrow. "Did you two actually polish your CADs? And I thought my partner was bad. Oh well. Welcome to the DIC, newbies."

... Yeah, Permission granted. {= ) Just a couple of things to keep in mind, though: First, it's Implausible Crossovers. The Department of Improbabilities is something different.

Second, don't try too hard. A couple of places in your sample are a little wordy, like "innumerable amounts of loving friends." Just "innumerable loving friends" would do, and it would save you from misusing the word "amount" with something that requires the word "number." Remember, you measure amounts and count numbers.

Another example of wordiness is "For much of my childhood, I saw this as inspiring as each year coincided by fireworks illuminating my passing age." I'm actually not sure what you're going for here, but I'll make a guess: "The celebration and fireworks coinciding with my birthday inspired me during much of my childhood." Sometimes, "poetic" language has to be abandoned in favor of language that gets the point across.

Anyway, I second the cheer for more people working crossovers. We are writing for a terribly under-represented department. Are there any particular continua you're interested in?

~Neshomeh

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