Re: Re-Introduction and Agent ConCrit

Re-Introduction and Agent ConCrit by Tira on 2014-07-25 16:47:00 UTC Reply

Hi, I'm Tira. I originally joined about two years ago; then I fell off the face of the earth, thanks to college. Now I've recovered (and graduated), and am looking to get back into the community.

I've seen several other people posting agent profiles for review, which seems like a brilliant idea. It should be noted that Natalie in particular is a work in progress; I've just gotten my hands on an English translation of the Fate/Zero novels, and hopefully those will help me make her a more authentic part of the 'verse than year-old memories of the anime and the somewhat Engrish-y wiki.

Aaron Hunter
Natalie Morgan

Same-time reintro! by Anonymouse on 2014-07-27 08:46:00 UTC Reply

Welcome back! Incidentally, I actually just came back from falling off the planet a year ago, but that can't stop me from giving you a welcome-back present, can it?

Here's a Black Box rocket launcher from the TF2 continuum, because rocket launchers.
Welcome back! by Ailavyn Siniyash on 2014-07-26 05:05:00 UTC Reply

*tosses you a lined Infinite Notebook from my absurdly large overstock*

(It has urple covers and wilver binding. Do be careful. I would not wish to be responsible for your blinding.)

-Aila

Thanks! (nm) by Tira on 2014-07-26 22:22:00 UTC Reply

Welcome back! by Desdendelle on 2014-07-25 22:02:00 UTC Reply

Here, have a cup of Earl Grey tea (don't let the leaves eat you), scones, and jam!
I won't critique Aaron because I don't know anything about the Falloutverse, but Natalie feels really, really, really similar to a certain Natalia. Is that a coincidence?

Re: Welcome back! by Tira on 2014-07-26 01:28:00 UTC Reply

That's one of the two characters I named her after, the other being Black Widow. Originally, I was going to say that she picked the name out in honor of those characters, but I couldn't come up with a decent enough badfic name for her. She was actually called Natasha in some drafts, but I don't understand Russian last names.

Within the context of her original fic, Natalie was intended to have been created by a Suethor who completely missed the point of Fate/Zero in favor of "omg Gil is so hawt!!" and perceived Kiritsugu as "super meen!" So she created an antagonist who was similar to him, persecuting the Sue by trying to kill her for things that were totally not the Sue's fault at all! (Like killing a bunch of people by mistake. But the Sue angsted about it, so it was okay.) You could tell Natalie was totally not justified because she used icky guns instead of having cool 'magickal' powers. Naturally, the assassins didn't exactly agree with this assessment...

In-universe, I can see Natalie teasingly flirting with Aaron to make him uncomfortable, in the same way that Natalya does with Kiritsugu, and claiming that, as an attractive "onee-san" figure who isn't actually related to him, it's either that or be so blindingly immature as to appear incompetent (a la Taiga), and he doesn't have good enough aim for the latter option.

Re: Re-Introduction and Agent ConCrit by zdimensia on 2014-07-25 17:47:00 UTC Reply

What universes you intend to use these two for?

I guess I got to buckle down and watch AOT. (Stupid Netflix, forcing me to read subtitles or go to less legit sites for the dubs.) What I do see about Aaron is interesting. He seems like a good foil for Natalie. What will his dual memories do to him, if anything?

I'm liking Natalie's attitude that she acts cool about what's happening and redirects her emotions like a weapon. She reminds me of one of my own with the snarking and the smoking.

Don't worry, they're different enough. But I would like to show you something that was said about my less-flappable character...

"Agent Feinstein feels like a rather unique character for the PPC. I don't think we've had a brusque secretarial personality in an agent before, and that alone makes her entertaining to watch/read. At first, I was worried that she was too aloof from things happening around her, since a large source of a mission's entertainment value comes from what the agents experience. But you showed that she is stuck facing missions of a type particularly distasteful to her, and that she isn't necessarily the best at thinking on her feet when she is met with an unexpected encounter."

For yours, she already takes things out on the target. Does she ever put in extra range time or train on a punching bag to get rid of leftover problems? Will she ever snap and go too far? Will anything ever phase her?

I got caught up in the description of "not being able to control her powers unless it was inconvenient" until I figured out that you were describing the Sue. I'm going to blame my poor reading habits for that one.

Re: Re-Introduction and Agent ConCrit by Tira on 2014-07-25 18:44:00 UTC Reply

Probably a lot of fantasy literature, video games, and some high-action seinen anime.

Aaron's dual memories mostly mean that he can reference the canon plot of Fallout 3 while still having awkward reactions to AoT!Mikasa and Armin, because they're basically his childhood friends.

Natalie does get flustered, just not in combat situations. If/when she snaps, I think she'd get very businesslike (as opposed to Aaron, who tends to start shaking and fly into homicidal rages). That's the point she pulls out the "shoot them in the lungs and charge them while they drown in their own blood" trick, which Upstairs is very, very much not in favor of. She does put in a lot of time at the range, but more for fun than anything; she's kind of a gun nut.

Personally, I can't watch the dubbed version; we watched the sub in in my Anime Club, and once I've seen one version, switching VA's is just too disconcerting.

Welcome back! by Iximaz on 2014-07-25 17:30:00 UTC Reply

Have a squawking mini-moose!

Thank you! (nm) by Tira on 2014-07-25 18:46:00 UTC Reply