Subject: That's a very cool video
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Posted on: 2014-06-24 04:49:00 UTC
I have to admit, though, the rhythm in poetry has long eluded me. While I do use it when I can, I don't really get it. And when I do get it and create a rhythm that makes sense to me, no one else can ever figure out what it is. :(
But thanks for offering! I'll probably take you up on that!
So...
I have some stories I'd like beta'd. Seven, to be precise. Details below. I've never used Google docs before, but from what I hear it's really convenient, so that's how I'd like to do this.
Story #1: Redwall
Title: Once a Warrior
Summary: How does former Abbey warrior Martin react when an old enemy appears on the path in front of the Abbey?
Other: It sounds like this should go longer, but I've no intention of continuing it. Even now I'm having second thoughts about writing it, so a second opinion is valued.
Rating: PG, for threats of violence and what have you.
Especially Looking For: Clarity. I'm not always sure if I said what I meant.
"Story" #2: The Lord of the Rings
Title: The Land Called Imladris
Summary: A poem about the life and death of Aragorn and Arwen
Other: I've been working on this for nine years, you heard me right, nine years, and there's still something just a little off about it.
Rating: PG, for character deaths and whatnot
Especially Looking For: Someone who can help me with word choice as it applies to rhythm (I think)
"Story" #3: The Chronicles of Narnia
Title: The Fall of Charn
Summary: Jasmine led her troops up the palace stair, Jadis' eyes flashed at her fearless dare. "Vict'ry!" cried Jasmine, then "Vict'ry!" with force. "Aye, vict'ry," quoth Jadis, "But not yours."
Other: A free verse poem that sort of (?) rhymes. Contains Christian implications, so either be okay with that, or be Christian, I guess? Also, be okay with haphazard "rhythm."
Rating: PG, for nonviolent (?) death
Especially Looking For: Help with word flow (Is that a thing?)
Story #4: The Chronicles of Narnia
Title: Two Worlds
Summary: After she returns from Narnia the first time, Lucy considers the similarities and differences between it and her own world.
Other: Also contains Christian whatchama. A really short piece I'm considering regretting.
Rating: G
Especially Looking For: Organization and comprehensibility
Story #5: Homestuck
Title: The Derse Escape
Summary: Dirk is caught and trapped in a cell on Derse with an ill Roxy, who is worsening by the minute.
Other: I'm regretting this one already. I started writing a somewhat angsty piece "to see if I could." The only reason it's up here at all is because I spent an entire road trip on it.
Rating: PG, for violence and some things that may produce nasty imagery (of the sort of gory variety)
Especially Looking For: Characterization and speech patterns for Dirk, Jake, and the Condesce, among others
Story #6: Homestuck/Redwall crossover
Title: The Gods We Can Never Know
Summary: Crossover with Redwall, and one of the more bizarre things I've ever written. The universe they created was the universe containing Mossflower. Over the years they have been forgotten, but fragments of tales remain.
Other: Yeah, yeah, bizarre, I know. But I really think it works. Inspired by this piece.
Rating: G
Especially Looking For: Someone to correct my horrid attempts at poetry and poetic descriptions
"Story" #7: Homestuck
Title: Dreams of Gold
Summary: The Prospitians reflect on their Dreamer.
Other: A school assignment. The assignment was to write a poem in three verses and then write it backwards. The challenge was making it so it still made sense backwards. It was incredibly stupid, but I'm pleased with the poem that came out.
Rating: G
Especially Looking For: Someone who can help me with concrete word choices
So there's all my stories. All are complete and ready for betas at this point. And I'd just like to say, the more the merrier! Thanks in advance.
And Did You Know™ that the Greek letter we get our word "beta" from is actually pronounced "vee-tah" in Greek?
I've got a little piece from the Cafeteria Kitchens, and I was hoping to get it glanced over before I put out a link. Anybody interested? Canons of interest include: PPC (major), Fairy Tales (minor), and Elder Scrolls IV: Oblivion: Shivering Isles (very minor). The piece is currently sitting just shy of 2000 words, and probably needs a stronger conclusion, but it's a pretty simple one.
If anyone's interested, contact info for me is just my username here at gmail.com.
If you're still looking for help with the poems when I get back from my vacation, I'd be interested. I don't consider myself a poet, but the best part about it for me has always been picking the right words for the meter, and I'm not afraid of doing crazy things like using apostrophes and breaking sentences across lines to make it work. Also, I'm at least passingly familiar with all the fandoms you've mentioned.
I should be fully available as of July 1. For now, have this cool video about the Beatles and prosody. {= )
~Neshomeh
I have to admit, though, the rhythm in poetry has long eluded me. While I do use it when I can, I don't really get it. And when I do get it and create a rhythm that makes sense to me, no one else can ever figure out what it is. :(
But thanks for offering! I'll probably take you up on that!
(The other canons I don't know well enough; I technically "know" the Lord of the Rings, but there are others here who know it far better!)
Aaaaaand while it's not a requirement, if you put the stories in GDocs (or Drive or whatever we're calling it nowadays), then I might be able to work on it on my phone at work tomorrow, so I can get it back to you faster.