Beta Request (grammar, in particular)

Subject: Beta Request (grammar, in particular)
Author: Miah
Posted on: 2014-02-23 04:02:00 UTC

This is for a fanfic set in Haven. I realize probably no one else has canon knowledge for Haven, but I'm willing to take my chances on canon. My grammar on the other hand has always been shaky, and with not having written in so long, is now rusty on top of that.

So the request is mostly for grammar, with a bit of 'Were the voices consistent?' 'Are the emotional reactions within he realm of plausible for a human being?' Nothing more specific, unless someone does happen to know the canon.

The fic is long. A bit over 31,000 words.

If you do know the canon, this is an AU after episode 2x10, with some mentions of canon events in episodes 3x3 and 3x4, and is centered on Duke.

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Hello there, again. by Miah on 2014-02-20 23:10:00 UTC Reply

I guess I'll jump on the sort of returning bandwagon. I've been checking the Board at least semi-regularly again since around Christmas, and made a couple of posts. Though they were mostly late toward the bottom of the page.

I've been back on the IRC for a while. RL stuff has been keeping me pretty busy, everyone knows that drill.

For people that don't remember me, I'm Miah. :D

I'm married (Warcabbage), and we have three boys ages 14 (Evulcarrot), 12 (Leatherbroccoli), and 5 (The Doomsprout). We're the Angry Veggie family. :) We have three cats, two rats, and two turtles, and live in Arkansas in the US.

I tend to read a lot of fanfic. Mostly related to TV shows. I have a particular soft spot for slightly cheesy science fiction shows. My current favorite is Haven. I've also been a fan of Psych, NCIS (through season 6), Stagate Atlantis, Stargate SG-1, Sanctuary, Warehouse 13, Eureka, Sherlock Holmes (books and movies), Lord of the Rings, Pern, Xanth, and I am sure I am missing others.

I tend to fad over a fandom, watch a whole series in just a few days or weeks, spend a while reading fanfic for it, and then drop it for a while.

I also play Skyrim, and a little bit of Oblivion. I play Shadowrun and drive the DM (Hi Data!) crazy with characters like acrobatic gnomes that use tumbling as an offensive weapon and glowing green Sasquatches with prehensile tails.

I just passed my third PPC anniversary. I found the PPC by reading a story of Indemaat's on ff.net and following her links back here like a lost puppy dog. I have Permission and some missions in NCIS, Stargate SG-1, Stargate Atlantis, Sherlock Holmes (book and movie, not Sherlock), Sanctuary, LotR, and Harry Potter. I wrote a lot with Cadmar. (He writes the best version of Luxury!)

Beta Request (grammar, in particular) by Miah on 2014-02-23 04:02:00 UTC Reply

This is for a fanfic set in Haven. I realize probably no one else has canon knowledge for Haven, but I'm willing to take my chances on canon. My grammar on the other hand has always been shaky, and with not having written in so long, is now rusty on top of that.

So the request is mostly for grammar, with a bit of 'Were the voices consistent?' 'Are the emotional reactions within he realm of plausible for a human being?' Nothing more specific, unless someone does happen to know the canon.

The fic is long. A bit over 31,000 words.

If you do know the canon, this is an AU after episode 2x10, with some mentions of canon events in episodes 3x3 and 3x4, and is centered on Duke.
Nice to meet you, Miah! by Legacy on 2014-02-22 20:00:00 UTC Reply

I'm just a year old on the PPC, so you probably haven't met me before. But then, neither did Bryn. Anyways, have a welcome back Fluffy Velociraptor!

Just as I have warned the others who have gotten these in the past two weeks, the Fluffy Velociraptors haven't gotten out much lately, so they might try to hug your face. It is not a good idea to let this happen.

Watch out, please. :)

Thanks! :D by Miah on 2014-02-23 03:49:00 UTC Reply

I'm sure Castor the mad scientist in winged kitten (cat now, I guess) and Ronan, the mini-Wraith will love the company.

Hello! by Autumn_68 on 2014-02-22 03:28:00 UTC Reply

Welcome back! Here, have a bar of Bleepolate and a torch that shines ultra-urple light. To be honest, I'm not being so active recently, trying to make a little more than welcome-posts (hopefully) at least once a week.

Anyway, welcome back, and enjoy the PPC!

~Autumn
Welcome! by Sevenswans on 2014-02-22 02:47:00 UTC Reply

*Dumps random stuffs of returnbie quality on you*

I think one of them is a spatula and another one is a teddy bear cactus!
Have a welcome-back plover! (nm) by Tawaki on 2014-02-21 16:42:00 UTC Reply
Welcome back! by doctorlit on 2014-02-21 05:53:00 UTC Reply

Man, it's so nice to see old friends getting more active again!
Welcome back, Miah! by son_of_heaven176 on 2014-02-21 04:25:00 UTC Reply

Is February becoming the Month of the Returnbie or something?
Hey! It's the one who does the ACD Holmes missions! by Lily Winterwood on 2014-02-21 01:08:00 UTC Reply

How have you been? I'm the one who does the BBC Holmes missions. What's your favourite story in the original canon?

(Mine is probably The Adventure of Charles Augustus Milverton. I'm not entirely please with how the BBC recreated it, but eh.)

Re: Hey! It's the one who does the ACD Holmes missions! by Miah on 2014-02-21 01:24:00 UTC Reply

I have a soft spot for The Adventure of The Red-Headed League. The Sign of Four was also good, because it did present the action side of the duo more directly.

Although, honestly I believe my very favorite Holmes story is a fanfic titled, "The Particular Problem of Postern Prison" by Westron Wynde.

She is an excellent writer, and I would gladly pay money for hard back bound copies of her young(er) Holmes stories.

There is a young Sherlock Holmes series that I liked. by Lily Winterwood on 2014-02-21 20:34:00 UTC Reply

I won a copy of one of its books in a mystery-writing competition and enjoyed it immensely. It's Eye of the Crow by Shane Peacock. I found the prose intriguing And gripping, and the sly references to the ACD canon fantastic. Despite it being children's fiction the mystery wasn't obviously solvable, too, which is great.

Miah! *HUGS* by Pretzel on 2014-02-21 00:39:00 UTC Reply

Hi, gorgeous! It's good to see you again. ^^

Hugs! back by Miah on 2014-02-21 00:51:00 UTC Reply

I missed you!

Same here. by Pretzel on 2014-02-21 00:54:00 UTC Reply

It's good to see you're back, even if it's in a diminished capacity. I'm pretty much a lurker these days, but I've been fiddling with the idea of coming back with a new set of agents, though I'm not sure what Department they'd be in.

First fanfic! (and new agents) by Miah on 2014-02-21 01:09:00 UTC Reply

I just finished my first fanfic! I'm actually excited about writing again, for the first time in over a year.

It's crazy how many fanfics I've read and never felt the urge to seriously try writing one until now.

I'm actually really nervous about going through with posting it though. :p

Caddy and I have been trying for a long time to get a new agent pair out. We've had their first Intro done for, a long time except the polishing, but can never quite get our act together (and yeah, I am a mostly to blame for that one).

Then I was looking through stuff and found maybe five missions in varying states of completion for Miah and Cali and Kelok and Unger. It may be that none of those ever see the light of day, though.

Oh, nice. by Pretzel on 2014-02-21 01:13:00 UTC Reply

I just finished a 'fic for a Big Bang over on LJ. I'd love to read yours. What's it about?

I've got a mission that's like, maybe a third of the way done for Ian and Lee, but I'm not happy with it. I think I'm going to move on from them for the time being, with perhaps the occasional background mention. Of course, that could change if I find a really good badfic to send them out on. As for my new agents... I kinda want to have a more fandom-based Sentinel/Guide pair (because that's one of my favorite cheesy Nineties' shows, and fandom has really taken the main concept interesting places, which would be something I'd want to exploit), but I'm not sure what Department to put them in.

Re: Oh, nice. by Miah on 2014-02-21 01:39:00 UTC Reply

I love Big Bang, do you have a link?

It's about Haven, which is a small fandom show on Syfy. This is an AU taking off from episode 2x10, where a really interesting bad guy was killed off in favor of making the plot weirder. One of the characters was getting sucked down a potentially really dark path tangled up with this bad guy.

I AU'd the timeline to be a little more spread out than canon (seriously the time mentioned in episodes adds up to over 15 months, but the writers later came back and claimed it all happened in less than 5 months, which makes my brain hurt), had that episode end with the bad guy not being killed, and let it run from there to see how bad things could get for the character who was tangled up with the bad guy.

The fic is in GDocs right now. I can post a link, but it is not beta'd yet.

It's not up yet, so no, I don't have a link. by Pretzel on 2014-02-21 02:12:00 UTC Reply

I used to watch Haven, but sort of drifted away after the first season ended.

It definitely took a turn for the strange after season 1. by Miah on 2014-02-21 02:29:00 UTC Reply

I still haven't watched season 4, but I have read some stuff about it and it gets /really/ weird then.

But I really like Duke and Nathan. The writers have almost accidentally written them into really fascinating characters with wonderfully complicated backgrounds.

I'm almost completely convinced that they dated at some point in time, maybe at the end of high school or shortly thereafter, because they put more effort into annoying each other (while at the same time refusing to not constantly be around each other) than anything short of close family or former lovers can usually manage.

Just my little theory, anyway.

When you get yours up, I'd like to read it.

Nice. by Pretzel on 2014-02-21 02:31:00 UTC Reply

The Big Bang should be up around March. I'm very excited; this is the first one I've ever participated in, and I can't wait to see what sort of artist gets my story and what kind of media they produce for it.

Hello! *waves* by Ailavyn Siniyash on 2014-02-20 23:33:00 UTC Reply

You gave me a granola recipe that one time I went on the IRC! I remember you! (And, for some reason, I still haven't made the granola.)

But here, have a Generic Gift!

Rewelcome!

(My, so many exclamation points!)

-Aila
I haven't give gifts for a while. by darklordaakmal on 2014-02-20 23:32:00 UTC Reply

Here, have some virtual water spinach, kacang botor, and bambangans to be your food stock or pets, according to your desires.
Welcome back! by Mikelus on 2014-02-20 23:18:00 UTC Reply

Congrats on a third anniversary here.
Welcome back! =oD by wobblestheclown on 2014-02-20 23:15:00 UTC Reply

I joined while you were gone, so, yeah. Lovely to meet you! Please accept this Bleeprin-laced custard pie and collapsible unicycle, because your attic does not yet contain enough random possessions to form a car boot singularity. =]