Subject: Added!
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Posted on: 2014-01-06 14:51:00 UTC

I made a few tweaks, mostly taking out gratuitous capitalization, and a couple for grammar:

"who watches over them it with shaking red pens." (It = the fic being watched over. This verse is still a little shaky, since you refer to the pair of agents in the singular with "who watches" but plural everywhere else, but I don't know how to fix it without an actual rewrite of the line, and you can refer to a group in the singular, so... meh?)

"We really hope you'll ask us to visit you soon." (Nobody asks to visit themselves.)

Overall, I like this filk a lot. It doesn't depart very much from the source material, but it scans really well and has a clear narrative, and it's fun. I love Jonathan Coulton, too. ^_^ I didn't know this particular song existed before I looked it up to see how the heck something called "Chiron Beta Prime" was a Christmas song, but I'm glad to know it now!

~Neshomeh

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