Subject: Whoahh, I like this!
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Posted on: 2015-08-06 20:31:00 UTC

And I don't even know anything about this continuum.

The butter side down test made me laugh, and the remarks about clocks in PPC HQ made me giggle. I can't remember having ever said this about other missions; they mostly just make me smile.

BTW I smiled a lot here; Ix already covered that.

Of course I deliver:

She cleans up real nice ...
I believe this should be "really nice", but I'm not a native speaker and may be wrong.

[Present tense detected.  Revert agents to to permanent past tense Y/N?]
Repetition.

Sean quickly threw the CAD as far as he can
I'm not sure whether this is intentional. Considering that Sean is probably still able to throw a CAD as far as he could then, it may be a stylistic choice. (Like the high-heeled shoes that so many World One women wear, which didn't stick out as odd to me. I actually like that you apparently don't believe that, since the narration is in past tense, everything must be in past tense.)

He just wouldn’t be be having four days of non-stop woobified wangst in the first place.
Repetition.

Hild shudders.
Tense shift.

HG

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