Subject: I liked the built-in assassination method,
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Posted on: 2015-07-25 16:16:00 UTC

... and Amy’s reaction to it.

Some technical errors:

The skutter stopped by the two agents and waggled its head at the mess near their feet, then trundled back back down the corridor, presumably to fetch the necessary cleaning supplies.
Obvious repetition.

She also objected to him calling her a child, despite that fact that she was one ...
Shouldn’t this be "the fact that"?

At that, the Sue let a gasp of fear ...
I suspect that a word may be missing there.

HG

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