First, I only decided to read this when I saw that you'd added it to Za'kiir's wiki page, and I could see what the fandom was and also what badfic it was. I had no idea you'd double-posted until I saw the replies to this thread. Including more detail about the mission in your posts might help you get more responses.

Second, when you claimed this fic, you saw the note about how this fic's Cluny was in FicPsych in 2008, right? How come you didn't do anything to resolve that? I was looking forward to seeing how someone would handle that. I has a sad. {= (

~Neshomeh

Still catching up after being offline for some days, I had something to say, but I was too tired to put my thoughts together last night.

His eyes landed on the form of his partner ...
This gives me the mental image of detachable eyes flying around like helicopters, landing on interesting places for closer inspection. But this may be just me, not knowing the prevalent metaphors and having read too much weird PPC stuff. Since two beta readers who are native speakers apparently didn’t get this image, it’s probably okay to say it this way, but considering most PPCer’s impatience I’m never sure whether the beta readers have actually seen the final version.

Ratty went into full-blown wagnst to top her previous wails off as the punctuation-storm continued.
This should be "wangst" (and spell-check should know that this is a word in the PPC).

As soon as the neuralyzer was deactivated ...
Is there really something to be deactivated? I never got the impression that canons are still under the neuralyzer’s active influence while the agents help them fill the gaps in their memories, reminding them where they should be and what they should be doing (and telling them what they shouldn’t remember from this reorientation period, like having met the agents). But there may be different interpretations of how the neuralyzer works.

Generally, this is a solid mission I could enjoy, although everything I know about Redwall I learned from other missions to Redwall.

HG

I've made this mistake, too. You never repost a mission. Ever. Just... don't, okay?

I know this is incredibly blunt, but bluntly is the only way to explain this. It pushes threads off the front page, and basically just wastes space with a duplicate thread.

If your mission's already been posted, don't take up another thread re-posting it just because it's being bumped down the page. People can still see it's there; all you're doing is wasting Board space.