Hoom, hoom.

Activity: I know you, no knee-jerk reactions, you've been around.

PPC knowledge: Your agent profiles are problematic in this respect.

James' recruitment story makes no sense. First of all, if an agent can't find a plothole a canon character's been shoved into, they have no business being out in the field doing solo missions. Any decent agent would not have told a bit about the PPC, much less made a deal with them, unless they planned on recruiting them, are on the verge of charging and killing them, or will neuralyze them afterwards. Since you say Emma meant to 'pacify' him, I assume she was going to kill him, which means she should have never accepted his deal on the first place, and if she was planning on killing him, it means his character was bad enough to not be recruited in the first place.

Fic to spork: Yeah, that's a doozy, aright.

Writing ability (creative): Um... your prompts are fine. I didn't find them particularly interesting, but that might be because I had a bad day at the army. Your agent profiles aren't. The Sue's behaviour in James' backstory doesn't make sense — I haven't seen lots of Sues that let bits upstage them like that; I've already mentioned the recruitment process; and Emma's background seems borderline Sue-ish to me (mainly because recruiting a random someone off the Internet is a very stupid thing for a secret society to do).

Writing ability (technical): much better than the previous attempt, and you obviously got your pieces beta'd for SPaG. You do have a couple problems (I spotted at least one tense shift, and there's stuff like "into the PPC Headquarters" — the 'the' shouldn't be there), so maybe another beta is warranted.

That said...
Rina Dives appears in your control prompt. This, in and of itself, is good — I like intertextuality! What is bad is that she is OOC. Furthermore, I have it from Iximaz that you did not let her see the final product before publishing it. This is a faux pas — if you borrow other people's characters, you are obliged to let them check for OOC and the like.

So: Permission Denied. Your characters need more work, your SPaG and/or beta'ing process should be touched up, and that last issue bothers me immensely. While you have made progress, you are still not ready, methinks.

Duh...