Subject: Earl-y warning
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Posted on: 2015-06-29 20:31:00 UTC
Great mission. I've never heard of Black Butler before. But if it's got Inspector Abbeline in it, I'll have to check it out.
One small nitpicking point... When the CAD said "Earl Ciel Phantomhive", that was wrong. The correct name for an Earl would be "Earl of Phantomhive", "Lord of Phantomhive", or just "Lord Phantomhive". That's assuming Phantomhive is the name of his Earldom. If it's his personal surname, you can call him something like "Ciel, Earl Phantomhive of [wherever]" but that's a bit of a mouthful so don't bother!
Anwyay, the important thing is, never get the name of his Earldom mixed up with his personal names.
But apart from that, it was a brilliant story. Loved the cats, and the idea the POVs are minis. And you made the setting clear enough that I could follow everything without knowing anything about the canon.