Activity: I recognize your name and you've been around a while, so you're good there. Gold star.

PPC Knowledge: Squeaky. For one, you've completely missed the DIA's point. The DIA does not go after Sued agents - that was the job of the DIO, and they were closed after Swan's Egg. The DIA aren't secret police; they're basically a combination of PPC!blue police and a Rescue and Evac unit. You've written them completely off.

Fic to Spork: kill it with fire Yeah, you're good here.

Characters: Emma is OK. Balthazar... let's say he has some screw-up potential, but it's not 'oh gods no', and I tend to think people know themselves and won't jump above their belly button, so to speak, so you're clear here.

Writing Ability (Creative): I wasn't exactly holding my ribs throughout, but I wasn't face-palming, either. I liked the Oompa-Loompa'ing console, for one. Your prompts have a nice flow, too. Clear.

Writing Ability (Technical): Nope. Your pieces are clearly not beta'd, and it shows: mainly, your commas are all over the place, and you have some weird tense shifts; for example - "She was only dabbling in some fan-fictions, but one day she would publish her own book." That's grammatically incorrect; the correct form is "she dabbled in fan-fiction, but wanted to publish her own book one day."
It's clearly rushed and also something a good beta would catch. You don't pass here.

Therefore: Permission denied. You need to touch up your PPC knowledge. You also need a beta.