Anyone want to beta a bit of nonsense that I'm most definitely blaming on hS?

Okay, let me explain. As happens more often than I'm going to admit, Huinesoron made a comment that inspired me to write something. Surprisingly, this time it's both longer than 500 words (803 at last count) and complete. And, as it's both not quite a drabble and at least borderline canon, I'd like it to be betaed before I post it.

The only canon it involves is the general PPC canon, although some vague knowledge of how Vulcans behave might be useful. (Naruto canon is also briefly involved, but I wasn't really trying to get it perfectly correct--it's as accurate as the knowledge of the agent in question, which is very minimal). I mainly just want a second opinion on the agent interactions, and to know if any of the wording turned out odd.

Anyone interested?

~DF

PS: This can also become a general thread for beta-searching, if anyone else has something they want betaed. Recycle threads, everyone! :)