Subject: Here I am again
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Posted on: 2015-04-06 09:40:00 UTC
not understanding much of what was going on in the badfic. Apparently it wasn’t much anyway. But your sporking kept my attention long enough to spot a typo:
He waved nervously, wishing he’d bought a set of Guardian Orbitars with him on this mission.
May you have meant "brought"?
HG
And I plan to do one more of these before I put this team on reserve, as I have co-writes planned with Edhelistar and firemagic involving them. Anyway, enjoy my latest mission, "Featuring Dante from the Devil May Cry Series"!
not understanding much of what was going on in the badfic. Apparently it wasn’t much anyway. But your sporking kept my attention long enough to spot a typo:
He waved nervously, wishing he’d bought a set of Guardian Orbitars with him on this mission.
May you have meant "brought"?
HG
I like Lapis and Sarah's banter. They get along so well :) Oh, and congratulations on your (the PPC's?) first mini-Mundus! Good luck handling your giant menagerie!
Not sure tinting the Word World "buge" is such a good idea. Remember, that color acts as a magnet for the Borg. I suggest either a normal beige tint or a nifty sepia tone.
Or DMC for that matter. I'd hate to think of the outcome of this happening in a Star Trek badfic, though! XD Seriously, though, I picked buge because it is the only Suvian color I know of with beige in it. I thought it would make a neat excessive counterpart to urple prose. I'd be open to other suggestions of the sort, though.
And yeah, the biggest source of conflict in this RC is between Lapis and Cupid. Watching the two of them fight over the ethics of letting a teenage angel have his Bleeport is pretty entertaining.
A few things, though:
1) Isn't the C-CAD able to detect when characters are possessed?
2) An error:
We still need to get Riku to medical
Capitalize "Medical."