Subject: I always need demonic intercession, if this is the result!
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Posted on: 2024-04-08 21:47:51 UTC

What a lovely interlude. Very funny, and it establishes Mega and Lindell's personalities and dynamics very well. I really enjoyed, and I hope to see more from you soon! Some favorite lines:

Last week in fact, her internal clock had informed her that it was Monday three days in a row.

snrk

On the other hand, that meant that they’d never get back to her RC. Surely there was some balance in between…

Naughty, naughty Meg.

Now for some minor SPaG nitpicking:

There's an extra space before

Meg didn’t like that. The last time she’d had a message was when Upstairs had unanimously decided to put a Power Limiter on her.

Even in human form, Meg could still smile like only a demon could.

Perhaps just "could still smile like a demon."?

“I don’t do “nice”,” Meg returned,

Double quotations use apostrophes.

“Right, rookie, this is the RC.” She got her laughter under control and opened the door.

Quotations end in commas when they're before prose.

“Like I said, I don’t do “nice”.” She looked up at him, raising her eyebrow.

Comma, and quotation marks.

--Ls liked Carlisle's cameo

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