Subject: Nice one.
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Posted on: 2015-02-05 12:16:00 UTC
That was a skillful job of killing something that could've been really NSFW-y in a way that was still readable. Nice!
And, 'son of Chaos' - um, yeah, no. I'm pretty sure I would've noticed if House of Hades personified Chaos - particularly as a woman. Though I do wonder whether the writer was thinking of Nyx (does she spell it that way, or did Riordan go with Nix? I forget), and got tangled up.
Also: timeline craziness like whoa. If Percy isn't 16 yet, what's Nico even doing at Camp Half-Blood? He ran way after Bianca died, and didn't really come back... uh... ever. Not to mention he not only wasn't openly homosexual - he doesn't seem to have admitted it to himself at that point. (Also, pillar of flame. Wut, Nico. Just, wut.)
One thing I particularly liked: your characterisation of Clarisse just before and after the exorcism. You showed us what 'possessed' looked like, and exactly how it's different from 'normal' - without descending into overkill-levels for either.
(And... hey, if Chaos is 'GAPless', where exactly is Roxy supposed to have... y'know... come out?)
hS