Re: Asking for ConCrit. Again.

Asking for ConCrit. Again. by darklordaakmal on 2013-01-20 16:00:00 UTC Reply

Alright. I guess that not many boarders here have watched Total Drama. That's OK, there is still a lot I can get complaints on, my grammar, my plot, my continuity, anything else. So, here I am again to present my next fic.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8926261/1/Blood

This fic, Blood, is about Justin's bloodlust and backstory. It's just the first chapter. Any comments on my writing skill will be used to improve it, so comments are very much in need.And don't hold back, poke any holes you can.

More stuff. by Ellipsis Flood on 2013-01-21 13:45:00 UTC Reply

I put it into a Google Doc and added some comments. Warning: May contain snark and nuts.

Click me!

A good experience. by darklordaakmal on 2013-01-21 16:58:00 UTC Reply

God, that experience was good. I really appreciate it.

I need help on three more of my fics. There are two others on my account, but it is in Malay. I hope that you will help me.

Also, one of my own fic, an Eyeshiel 21 and Fate/Stay Night crossover, needs a good sporking. Anyone with a kind heart should let me know before they sporked it.
Excellent! by darklordaakmal on 2013-01-21 16:03:00 UTC Reply

I'll work on these mistakes as soon as I can. Will you be my beta reader? If you couldn't, who should I approach?

It might take a week or so for me to correct everything. I intend to make this fic of mine multichapter, so I will notify you of the hanging points soon enough.

Thanks again. Your corrections is very much appreciated.

You should get someone who knows Total Drama. (nm) by Ellipsis Flood on 2013-01-21 16:10:00 UTC Reply

Good idea. by darklordaakmal on 2013-01-21 16:54:00 UTC Reply

But either they aren't as concerned about good writing as the entirety of PPC, or they won't give me concrits.

Re: Asking for ConCrit. Again. by Ellipsis Flood on 2013-01-20 21:49:00 UTC Reply

Not knowing Total Drama, I can't say anything about OOCness, but the first thing I noticed was the SPaG errors. You switch tenses from time to time (sometimes mid-sentence), I caught a don't that was used instead of a doesn't and in general, the SPaG's a bit wonky. This is nothing you couldn't fix if you got someone who read through it before you published it.

Just reread it with these things in mind and you'll find them.

Done! Well, only the tense... by darklordaakmal on 2013-01-21 05:15:00 UTC Reply

You did say my grammar was a bit 'wonky'. I do hope that you can be a bit specific on that. I had already edited my fic based only on its tense. I do hope that you'll give me more concrit.

Man, it feels like I'm having an English teacher again. Awesome!

Also, thanks again.
Thanks. by darklordaakmal on 2013-01-21 04:52:00 UTC Reply

I'll reedit it soon.