Subject: A few thoughts
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Posted on: 2014-12-20 20:23:00 UTC

It's a good mission overall, but I've noticed a recurring trend in your missions. You seem to typically focus more on expanding Rina's character than Randa's. The Ranger's Apprentice mission departs from this trend somewhat, but even there the conclusion focuses mostly on Rina's family.

It's a perfectly logical situation; since Rina is your own character, I'm guessing you feel more comfortable fleshing her out than you do establishing facts about a character that you're borrowing. However, it gives off an overall feel that Rina is the main character and Randa is her sidekick, as opposed to them getting equal billing, so to speak. I enjoy you writing and character development, so I'd like to see more of it for Randa as well!

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