Subject: Congrats!
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Posted on: 2014-12-01 16:00:00 UTC

I apologize for not responding sooner - I went to see How To Train Your Dragon 2 a second time in the local theater yesterday (I would *highly* recommend visiting the HTTYD continuum in a future mission btw), and ended up doing graduate research until one in the morning! Anyway, I think everybody's covered any proofreading we may have missed (I was going to correct it myself but I see you've taken care of it), so I'll probably go into some general topics.

For Miguel's abilities, direct time travel may be a little overboard, but I do imagine that a limited version of such a skill may make traveling through badfics a little bit easier (though not very much). You won't need an RA to skip past scene shifts, for example, but you will need one both to enter/exit the badfic and to jump to a different location. It may be possible that in a badfic, Miguel could skip only one or two chapters at the very farthest, if they're not important, but in general he'd probably go past only a scene or two. At least it'll make dodging Author's Notes easier, though.

I'm actually not interested in adopting any of the mini-Missingno, sorry to say - I already have a whole bunch of mini-Omnidroids, a mini-Sentinel, a mini-T. rex, a Spellcheck Scrat, and an Attack on Titan mini I accidentally spawned myself during a post on the Board (Eren Yager, I think). Since my collab with Desdendelle also deals with Pokemon, that technically means I'll have already adopted one mini-Missingno by the time we're done with that (though it's probably gonna take a while, due to responsibilities on both sides).

One little issue, however... I was honestly surprised to see you post this thing without getting a third person to beta-read it. Granted, there were two of us working on it, but I usually get at least two beta readers for the missions I write solo (And speaking of which, I wonder why haven't PoorCynic and Iximaz beta-read my first DMS mission yet? I remember the latter being more punctual for that Teen Titans mission I did last month...). I'll let you off on this time because I didn't see too many things wrong with this mission, Board-caught typos aside, but please remember to have your missions beta-read before posting them. I'd be happy to serve as a beta-reader, in fact - you know my e-mail address so contacting me shouldn't be too much of an issue.

Regardless, great job, and best of luck with your future endeavors! :D

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