Subject: Points!
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Posted on: 2014-10-12 15:17:00 UTC
Or rather, arguments. While the concept is interesting enough, the execution is very poorly done. First things first, Quirrel. He's been outright replaced; he simply doesn't act like Quirrel should (which is some sort of falling leaf-ish behaviour) and there's no justification whatsoever for the change.
Then there's Harry. Eleven year olds are not that smart - I've been one and I'm gifted and I'm not that intelligent. Even if he's well-read (and god knows I've had lots of books crammed in my head when I was eleven) he just can't be that sort of Palpatine-order-of-magnitude chessmaster-slash-manipulator. Add to that his ambition of wanting to become god and you have enough charges to execute this guy as a replacement.
Then there's the fact that the fic is a blatant author tract in the style of "Rationalism and Consequentialism are good!" which, in my opinion, is a bad thing to do when writing fiction.