How about this? His little girl

This probably might on the way too short to mission side, since it is only one chapter long and certifiably dead.

So, we have a potion gone wrong that is still nevertherless strong enought to drain Hermione of her intelligience and give it to Ron, which obviously would have turn them really OOC if this ever continued. Said intelligence draining turns Hermione mentally into a toddler, which in turn leads to her being literally turn into a toddler via another uncanonical potion.

Her parents abandon her, she gets adopted by Harry which convulutely turns into a legal adult and there is the unexplicable mention of "magical adoption" making the child look like their parents...

And then there is this lovely bit of badly done fourth-wall breaking " Up to now, this narrative has dwealt on Hermione's plight. The effects of the potion on her. Now, let's switch to Ron's. You may remember, and hopefully you do, or you've got short term memory loss issues, that the potion was meant to give Ron all the intelligence that Hermione lost. You might have assumed, since Ron's name was mentioned, literally, only ten times in the last chapter, compared to Hermione's twenty-four, that maybe since the potion was made so badly, Ron had escaped all its effects. "

So, what do you think? is this thing missionable?

I like that Selene got to show off her emotions more this mission. I didn't realize she liked Boromir so much, so it was nice to see the scary thunder-pire acting like the typical PPC agent more. (Full disclosure: I haven't read most of your past missions yet, so I don't know what she acted like much before I joined. I'll get around to them eventually, but you're kind of a low archival priority, since I doubt you're leaving anytime soon. (: )

Anyway, that emotional response to Boromir made the ending scene where he dies all the better. You can really hear from both agents' dialogue that they care about Boromir, but also that they respect him too much to interfere with his life, in the way any given Sue might.

I also like the extremely subtle bit of envy going on regarding the cloak. One thing that I think would have been improved would be seeing the action of Selene grabbing the cloak as it happened, rather than getting it as narration to Agent Kaitlyn afterwards. I get why you did from Kaitlyn's point of view, since it reinforces Kaityln's desire to get the cloak, but it would have been more exciting from Selene's pov.

The charge scene is especially excellent. I love that Kaitlyn delivers the charges in a way that Guinevere doesn't realize she's on the chopping block. It's a nice gesture to a less offensively bad character, but more importantly, it allows the agent and the Sue to have a more real conversation, because the Sue isn't instantly set on guard by antagonistic words.

All in all, a fun mission, you had some entertaining little moments, and did a few things new and different.

—doctorlit, who realizes his reviews more resemble flat discussions sometimes, but hopes they are still of some value, or at least interesting to read.

Is it bad that I was crying with the agents when they had to let Boromir die?

And wow, an abuse report already? I saw the review, but either I missed seeing them saying they would report you or it happened after the fact.


Anyway, I have another suggestion! This one's a oneshot, so hopefully it meets the length criteria this time... ^_^'

Fic Name: Bella Black (https://m.fanfiction.net/s/10730297/1/Bella-Black)
Description: Bellatrix Lestrange/Hermione Granger. I'm not kidding.

There are some bizarre scene breaks consisting of the characters' initials, like BBBBBBBBBBBBBB, HGHGHGHGHGHGHGHGHGHG, or BBHGBBHGBBHGBBHGBBHG. The POV changes all the time, from first person Bellatrix to first person Hermione to third person.

I can't figure out when in canon it's supposed to take place. I guess sometime during book seven, but there wasn't any mention of the Battle of Hogwarts from what I could understand and yet Hermione just happened to stumble across Bellatrix sobbing by the black lake. And instead of jinxing a Death Eater on sight? She goes up to her and asks why she's crying. *headdesk*

It's also rated K but there's at least one F-bomb and an extremely casual mention of Bellatrix being raped that made me mad.

My brain doesn't work right now, so I'll dispense with the formalities: Kelly The Roman Warrior by King Aurthr2 (Rated T). It goes a teeny bit over 6k words - 6,155, to be exact. It's bad because, well... it's basically "My Immortal" complete with a silly Sue and SPaG errors, except purportedly as a Lord of the Rings x Twilight crossover. Also has (bad) Roman antiquity stuff thrown in. To be honest... not sure whether it's trollfic or not.