Now I really want to return to Azeroth. by
Hieronymus Graubart
on 2016-07-20 10:54:00 UTC
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Androia never got further than from Teldrassil to Moonglade and Darkshore (pre-Cataclysm).
The typo S.M.F. noticed is here:
Below them stretched the Jade Forest, green treetops and pink cherry blossoms as far as they eye could see.
You don’t get a proper review because I couldn’t say anything that was not already said better, and since I couldn’t find two points of criticism I can’t take Poor Cynic’s expanded challenge anyway.
HG
Re: What's this? Agents getting vacation? by
Bramandin
on 2016-07-18 15:50:00 UTC
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I like how you lightened up on the angst.
It seems a little like the question of abortion or adoption with the debugger, but not so horrific to contemplate because she's not bonded to the fetus yet.
Aww! by
Granz the Ice Cream Monarch
on 2016-07-17 02:33:00 UTC
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Yes! Yes! Love it, love it, love it. This is perfect, and finally these two catch a break. Only one question: Does Zeb know what Ave knows about his existence? I can't believe that just now came to me.
This was a really good piece! by
S.M.F.
on 2016-07-16 22:22:00 UTC
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I can tell you know and love this game as much as the Aviator does. ^^ The descriptions of both Azeroth and Mt. Coronet were stunning.
I think I caught one instance of a "they" instead of a "the," but I can't for the life of me recall where it is. |D It's not a big deal, though.
Everything charcter-wise is progressing at a reasonable pace, and I definitely envy your agents for their food. XD
Thank you for writing!
It was a fun read. by
Desdendelle
on 2016-07-16 17:39:00 UTC
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Not much to say, really, except that the bit about Rhonin's speech made me chuckle and that it made my bad mood just a bit less bad?
What just happened? by
Hardric
on 2016-07-16 16:27:00 UTC
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Aviator and Zeb having some time for themselves, with moderate shenanigans, and mostly fun and good feelings? An as pure as possible moment of calm and heartwarming for both of them, but with enough sadness beneath to keep it realistic (Which could get a bit spoiled by the discovery of Supernatural and its tendance to chew all of its characters...)?
*pinches* It's really happening, woohoo!
I need a track to go with that.
Oh, and a small jab at Ellie's name. It will still be that one, right?
Expanding past for Zeb? Fry says this better than me.

Nuff said.
On a last note, what would be the Department Ave would be transferring for? On one handd, after the DMS, it could be vacations of another sort, on the minus side, it would mean less stories with her... Well, you're the boss, that will be your call.
Please keeps writing, Ix. Whatever the character, you rock.
A cute little interlude by
son_of_heaven176
on 2016-07-16 16:13:00 UTC
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I especially liked how Rina is finally opening up to the thought of talking about her pregnancy. Yoy did a good job showing her development from "Don't talk about it" to "I could really get behind this".
I just fear that the Flowers might throw a Bleepfic, or even a Legendary, at them the second they return!