Re: New Interlude, new PPC member. by
Bram
on 2016-06-29 19:02:00 UTC
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I liked the in-character explanation of what the PPC does. I'll probably read this again.
You got mini-boarders for beta-readers? Cool! by
Hieronymus Graubart
on 2016-06-27 12:54:00 UTC
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It is not impossible that sonofheaven176 goes by "sonofheaven176" on Google, but I’m quite sure that "Elieen" is wrong. Don’t feel too bad about this, you are not alone. I once caught "Hieonymus" in a fic I had beta’ed, hopefully before anybody else could see him. (Crediting the beta readers only after they did their job is a bad idea, because then the credits aren’t beta-read.)
Since I don’t trust the mini-boarders, and don’t know the sylvari’s language (or sylavari language?), I have to ask whether "sylavari" is the adjective form of "sylvari".
Also there is an unnecessary repetition:
She befriended me and told me of her plans to unite the the Three Orders of Tyria into One.
Besides these problems, this may be my favorite newbie-is-introduced-to-the-PPC story. Ava’s confusion and loneliness, and Salvo’s explanations are very well done, indeed, and their interaction is just great.
HG
I enjoyed them. by
Larfen J. Stocke, esq
on 2016-06-25 09:39:00 UTC
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So, wait, she cried? Tears? Liquid and all?
There's something odd about a plant crying. Even a plant person.
It'd be even more bizarre if the creeper cried, of course, so I suppose there's a strangeness bullet dodged there.
I'm sure she'll do fine in HQ. The place is used to sapient plant-types.
And another new thing with Salvo, because why not? by
SkarmorySilver
on 2016-06-24 22:08:00 UTC
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Wherein some poor creeper witnessses some poor guy give some other poor guy a... well, you do NOT wanna know what he gives him, let's leave it at that.