... for a mission in Harry Potter and Labyrinth. Canon knowledge is appreciated but not a must. To put it bluntly, the fic is barely able to touch either canon with a twenty feet pole.
I'm looking for input on SPaG (if you're good at commas I will love you forever) and the general flow/pacing. Since I've taken forever to finish the mission and rewrote the ending completely, I suspect it might be kinda jerky here and there.
Clocks in at just under 4300 words, including quotes from the fic and I'm on no kind of deadline. I started it over a year ago; it can wait a couple of weeks more for my betas.