Subject: Glad you liked it.
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Posted on: 2016-05-13 00:44:00 UTC
But I'm saying nothing. >:)
1) Fixed, thanks.
2) Fixed, thanks again :)
3) The translation given in Percy Jackson is "eat my pants", but I'm not sure if that's proper or not. Just quoting the book.
That Percy Jackson badfic I mentioned down the Board? Oh gods, what was I thinking with this one.
It's (not) the Aviator's birthday, and Zeb made a cake. And then there was glitter. So. Much. Glitter.
Thanks to the Sue replacing nearly instance of "I" with "we", she and Percy ended up simultaneously making the sign to ward off evil, causing Gabe to be whacked by the screen door with twice as much force.
"nearly every instance"?
HG
I was able to follow it with little trouble, even without having read the Percy Jackson books. Good work.
Do you really have it in for your Agents?! First the Bleep allergy, then Rose Potter, and now a portent of impending death? Then again, Hardric could be right and the cut was really for the Sue...
but if that were the case, then there would be three cuts, not two...
*looks through the LXX for an appropriate prayer*
*Ahem*
Either way, obligatory nitpicks ahoy:
1) “I’ll save the trouble of guessing. Spoiler alert: yes, yes you do,” the Aviator said in annoyance.
Missing word: "I'll save you the trouble of guessing."
2) This is… this is just… I can’t even He doesn’t even get snippy with her? She just drove a god OOC!
Missing punctuation before "He". I recommend an ellipsis or an em dash.
3) Braccas meas vescimini!
Do I detect Translatin? The last two words are correct Latin, but WORDS does not recognize the first word. What were you trying to say? "Eat my ____"
But I'm saying nothing. >:)
1) Fixed, thanks.
2) Fixed, thanks again :)
3) The translation given in Percy Jackson is "eat my pants", but I'm not sure if that's proper or not. Just quoting the book.
A neologism in a dead language. Will wonders never cease?
Seriously, how o you manage to write so much good stuff so fast? If you want to become a writer someday, just do it, you're guaranteed to success.
The cut was really for the glitterbag, so no need to worry, right? Right?
Then again, it is summer vacation, so I'm free to do whatever I want almost all day long.
*innocent expression*
Both inside the mission and out!
Great job, dealing with the most annoying cliche of the Percy Jackson universe: Percy's sister! Ugh... I can't stand them!
One mythological nitpick, if I may:
“why would Percy’s mom have named her daughter after a nymph who turned into a tree? I mean, she named Percy after one of the few Greek heroes to get a happy ending, so wouldn’t Atalanta or something make more sense?”
Atalanta's story doesn't end well, actually. Sure, after the Calydonian Boar Hunt she gets married and becomes the queen of either Beotia or Arcadia (sources differ on this one)...but she and her husband decided to do the waka-waka in Zeus's temple. Needless to say, the Big Guy wasn't happy, and turned them into lions.
Atalanta and her hubby weren't turned into lions by Zeus, but by Aphrodite, since they failed to honor her when they married.
...yeah, she wasn't the nicest goddess of love back then. ^^;
And to Iximaz I say: Great work on this mission, and man, that was quick! Kinda upsetting that a Ficubus had to turn up on the Aviator's birthday, though. D:
Though technically it's not her birthday anymore. :P
In some it's Zeus, his mother Rhea, or - as you said - Aphrodite. It still comes down to the fact that they've ended up as lions.
And derp me on that screwup, I haven't heard that part of the myth in years and it totally slipped my mind until now. Thanks for the correction. :)
A bit of sexist ending, but still by strictest definition, happy.
Then there's also Penelope and Odysseus, or Eros and Psyche.
It's a bit creepy to name your children after characters who got married.
In fact, the latter would be perfect. You would have 'Penny' Jackson as a nickname.
Naming a daughter of Poseidon after the rival of Athena who was turned into a spider is just asking for trouble. And Iphigenia was sacrificed by her father so he could get his ships to Troy or something like that. (Though in some versions she's rescued, IIRC.)
Penelope could possibly work, though.
Ariadne's the one with the ball of string. She got dumped by Theseus and picked up by Dionysus, which... well, she got to go to Olympus, but would you really want to be married to Mr D?
hS
I swear I know my mythology better than this. >.>
Theseus ditched her, but som versions of the myth pair her up with Dionysos after. Just like some versions see Iphigenia is indeed saved by Artemis, become her priestress in Taurid before being reunited with her brother Orest years later.
Remember, Mr. D was talking to Percy and he might not have wanted to make himself look bad.
(In hindsight I really should've added a joke about that fact earlier.)