Subject: I'll second that rant.
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Posted on: 2016-03-21 22:42:00 UTC

Not that I'm feeling particularly rant-y myself, but I don't see how so much as mentioning past events sets off the Sue-tracker. Plus, how many Sues have you ever seen to visit a shrink? I'm pretty sure that would count as negative Suedom points.

... Or, wait, did it go off because she was refusing to go, as though her history is so much weirder than all the other weird shit that's happened in/around HQ (and to Jenni, for that matter)? That might make sense. Reading it again, it's not specified exactly what set it off.

That aside, nice mission. {= ) I'm glad there's another HtTYD one, and wow, that fic sounds just about as dumb as "The Girl and Her Dragon." Blech. Gall and Derik send their condolences. Normally they'd offer a gift of alcohol, but under the circumstances, would your agents accept a flask of Monstrous Nightmare gel? It can be used for destruction, rather like napalm, but it also makes for great torches. Dead useful, really. (I had the thought that Gall might makes some money selling the stuff to Leto Haven in exchange for Dragon Chow and whatnot. It was probably Derik's idea.)

Best line: “You don’t have enough badges to train me!” Too bad Ave was too startled to get the joke.

A few typos:

She wrapped his arms around her jaws, struggling to keep them clamped firmly shut.

Her arms, surely?

“Right, Nightshade,” he panted, “also known a Sue Dragon"

As.

“What happened to ‘don’t talk about the fish thing?”

Missing a closing single-quote.

And... that's my two cents.

~Neshomeh

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