Subject: Looking for more concrit on this...
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Posted on: 2016-03-14 19:41:00 UTC
I re-wrote the story about Kelly in the sorting room.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QF0FlEAo-KlcoaVcPfgg1V0wgfEM6xe_UhM3iPkm7Ak/edit?usp=sharing
I tried to soften her a little bit, but decided that she would still have similar reactions. Is she still too much of a villain to work?
I was starting to think Kelly was an INTJ, which is usually villain material. Turns out that she's an ISTJ, which is a bit better, but still aloof.
Has anyone else typed their characters? How well do they conform to profiling?
I re-wrote the story about Kelly in the sorting room.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QF0FlEAo-KlcoaVcPfgg1V0wgfEM6xe_UhM3iPkm7Ak/edit?usp=sharing
I tried to soften her a little bit, but decided that she would still have similar reactions. Is she still too much of a villain to work?
It's improving, in my opinion(even though I'm just a lowly noob). I think Kelly might be a character I would want to read about. You spelled "propaganda" "propoganda" in the title, though.
Thanks, I'll try to remember to fix the title on my way out.
I'm testing Kelly against situations by actually doing mock-missions, but I'm having trouble finding a good one.
I want to write Kelly as trained and somewhat experienced, but her partner is going to be freshly-recruited.
I tried "it's not a blender, it's a coffeemaker," but I didn't like it because the charges came too fast with no redeeming paragraphs.
I tried "https://www.fanfiction.net/s/5120113/1/The-Lost-Girl" but other than NSFW squick, there isn't much bad writing to worry about. Fem!Harry could reasonably turn out more like Bella Swan, I think.
I do want to do https://www.fanfiction.net/s/243350/1/Remembering-Jada but not with a raw recruit. So not for the first mission.