This is weird. by
Hieronymus Graubart
on 2016-03-10 12:19:00 UTC
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Lux in a mission that’s not Bad Slash and not Bad Het or whatever happened in That Series. But you made it work astonishingly well.
My usual list of typos_
Did Hades decided to pull a prank on the demigods?
Should be "decide".
... apparently still ridded with guilt ...
Should be "ridden".
... an author’s note, which ended very chapter, begged for reviews.
You probably meant "every".
"What are they all going to do today?" would be a grammatically correct question, but if you write about Percy asking this question in indirect speech, the correct word order and tense would be "Percy asked what they all were going to do today".
... the entire group went to the Big House in order meet Chiron.
Missing word "to".
Without waiting for answer ...
Missing word "an".
I would probably enjoy missions in the Percy Jackson continuum more if I knew more about it. I only vaguely remember having seen parts of a movie or two.
HG
My commenting brain is on holiday. by
Huinesoron
on 2016-03-09 14:10:00 UTC
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It's been replaced by my inquisitive brain, which asks:
Why is Luxury on a DMS mission? Okay, wossname called her in, but... she's in Bad Slash. Wha'?
hS, baffled
Awesome! by
Ivy-M-Blue
on 2016-03-09 01:57:00 UTC
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Wow, that badfic was really bad. *hands chocolate* Awesome mission though, it was fun to read. :)