Subject: My commenting brain is on holiday.
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Posted on: 2016-03-09 14:10:00 UTC
It's been replaced by my inquisitive brain, which asks:
Why is Luxury on a DMS mission? Okay, wossname called her in, but... she's in Bad Slash. Wha'?
hS, baffled
Yes it is! William and VJ are back in action, baby!... Huh? What, it's only VJ? Oh... Well, we'll see how this goes.
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Lux in a mission that’s not Bad Slash and not Bad Het or whatever happened in That Series. But you made it work astonishingly well.
My usual list of typos_
Did Hades decided to pull a prank on the demigods?
Should be "decide".
... apparently still ridded with guilt ...
Should be "ridden".
... an author’s note, which ended very chapter, begged for reviews.
You probably meant "every".
"What are they all going to do today?" would be a grammatically correct question, but if you write about Percy asking this question in indirect speech, the correct word order and tense would be "Percy asked what they all were going to do today".
... the entire group went to the Big House in order meet Chiron.
Missing word "to".
Without waiting for answer ...
Missing word "an".
I would probably enjoy missions in the Percy Jackson continuum more if I knew more about it. I only vaguely remember having seen parts of a movie or two.
HG
The second one should actually be "riddled with guilt." Riddled here means "filled or affected with," like blue cheese is riddled with veins of mold or a target can be riddled with bullet-holes.
Sorry for not catching those, Matt.
~Neshomeh
No... Oh, please no. If that's the only form you've encountered the Percy Jackson universe in, I can say that you've seen nothing. They're just... ughhh
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Okay, fine! Second movie was... mediocre to say the best, but still better than the first. At least in the sequel there were some scenes done well.
It's been replaced by my inquisitive brain, which asks:
Why is Luxury on a DMS mission? Okay, wossname called her in, but... she's in Bad Slash. Wha'?
hS, baffled
Nesh asked me the same question, and I'm gonna say the same thing: There's no reason. I just wanted Lux to have some connection to Will and VJ, without having one of them date her, so I made them kinda friends. I do like Luxy's character, and I wished to see her in more missions.
Though it does look rather like more than that (but doesn't everything, with Lux?). ^_~
My question is more around her going on this mission. PPC missions are fraught with potential danger, and Lux isn't typically the person you think of to watch your back - like I said, she's a Slasher, not an Assassin. Is wosserface simply confident/naive enough that she thinks she'll be fine anyway, so can pick her partner based on who she'd like to hang out with?
hS
(Seriously, sorry for the lack of any real comments; I read it, but I think it fell out of the back of my brain. I may be tired.)
hS
I don't get much audience anyway :P
Wow, that badfic was really bad. *hands chocolate* Awesome mission though, it was fun to read. :)