Thank you, IntelligentAirhead. Will you accept a hug?


(Personally, I don't want people to see my old stuff either. My badfic got veeeeery insane. However, I'm willing to let it be sporked. Who knows, my characterization just might've saved a few OCs from death.)

After reading the first chapter, I can say, it is defanately fixable. The grammar aint bad, and the spelling as far as I can tell is fine. Here is the problem I see at the moment: description is lacking and the author is too involved in the story. Author's notes are slapped in the middle of the fic without any warning or true reason to exist other then sene changes. As for description, I have no idea who anyone looks like. Which, in hindsight is hilarious, seeing as characters are usualy rife with urple prose. I desided that mia has blue hair. Cuz you gotta have blue hair!

While I do not know Yu-gi-oh, and have only read the first chapter, it seems to need a story coach rather than a sporking. Still, I am sure these grammar natzis will find some things to work with. Plus, if you want it to be sporked, then who am I to juge.

It's a Yu-Gi-Oh badfic. I'm new here, I just made my intro post.

Also, perfect for some good old PPC comedy.

Still, I have since learned that some ideas should just stay in my head.