The Aviator and Zeb are flitting up to the only house shown in their surroundings, peeried through windows until Zeb waves the Aviator over.

Pretty good. I like how they were fairies for most of the mission.

Zeb bobbed his head awkwardly and went to his bed, brushing some fur off the sheets before setting them down.

I may be reading this wrong, because I’m not a native speaker and not very familiar with Zeb’s habits. Are you saying that Zeb brushed some fur off the bed sheets and then set the bed sheets down? Where have they been before he set them down? Is there a figure of speech I’m not aware of? My wild guess is that you wanted to say that Zeb put the books he was carrying down on the bed, and somehow lost a part of the sentence.

HG

(Eleven pages is short, right? :D)

Anyway, that meant I could actually read it. I don't have a lot to say, I'm afraid; I snerked at 'NeverLAN', and thought the idea of piggybacking Hook's plan was a nifty one (on your part, for storytelling, specifically; it didn't seem to gain the agents much).

I'm a little bit confused as to how the Suvian died? Did they leave her to drown, and if so, how did they know someone wouldn't come and rescue her? Heck, even Hook was after her, he could've plucked her off the rock to use in his dastardly schemes. Muahaha, etc.

[Reads interlude]

... well, I can't say I wasn't warned. ;)

hS

Haven't read the interlude yet, but the mission was OK. I only caught one spelling error:

They found several blackberry bushes, with plump fruits easily the size of their heads. They picked several berries—as many as they could carry—and perched on a leaf, plucking off individual druplets and biting into them, causing sweet juices to get everywhere.

There's an E missing: it's spelled "drupelet".

Memories stay forever.

Also happy to see Ave finally beginning to climb back from the pit.

Please don't break her again with My Immortal.

Nice to see Ave's slowly getting her bearings straight.

The mission was nice too - Zeb goign crazy with fairy stuff was very fun, and them both going around pickign and eathing berries was somewhat sooting... they were having a good time.

If I have to nitpick something, the ending of the mission felt somewhat rushed, but it might be me.